Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Sir/Madam

I read your advertisement that you are looking for a person to look after your six year old kid. I would like to know if the position is still open as i was looking to apply for the job. I have done a childcare course and been working in a day care from last two years. I observed that you looking a person to work Thursday and Friday. These days does not clash with my work days so i will be available all the time on those days. I am working at kidscare day care. I am very poliete with kids and love to play with them. I usually go to park to play with kids on those two days and i would love to take care of your child and i assure you that i will take cake of him. I will make sure that there will be no complaint and you guys will not regert offering me a job. I can join immediately.

Thank you

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a relevant reason for applying, mentioning your childcare course and two years of daycare work, and you describe being available on the days you believe the family needs help. However, the letter only minimally fulfils the task because it does not clearly explain why you want to live with the family for six months, and the free-time point is not answered: playing with children appears to describe your childcare duties rather than what you would do in your own free time in Australia. Your suitability is asserted through phrases such as “poliete with kids,” but would be more convincing with a specific example of responsibility or experience caring for a six-year-old. Address all three requested points directly and develop each with relevant details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a basic letter-like sequence: you refer to the advertisement, describe your experience and availability, and finish with thanks. However, the ideas are not arranged coherently enough, and the reader has to infer how some details relate to the task. For example, the statement about Thursday and Friday is followed by daycare work and then going to the park, without a clear distinction between your work schedule, childcare plans, and personal free time. The letter is also presented as one continuous paragraph, so its different purposes are not clearly separated. Use paragraphs for your reason for applying, your suitability and availability, and your plans outside work; connect each point explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough basic vocabulary to communicate the general subject, including “childcare course,” “day care,” “available,” and “take care.” However, the range is limited and some word choices or spelling errors make the letter less polished. “Kid” is informal for a letter to prospective employers, while “child” is more appropriate; “poliete,” “regert,” and “cake” also appear to be misspellings of “polite,” “regret,” and “care.” The phrase “take cake of him” may briefly confuse the reader. Build a wider set of accurate childcare and employment expressions, and proofread carefully so that spelling and collocations do not distract from your message.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate using mostly simple sentence patterns, with some attempts to join ideas using “as,” “so,” and “that.” However, the range is limited, and frequent errors affect accuracy. Examples include “I observed that you looking a person,” which needs a finite verb (“you are looking”), and “These days does not clash,” where the plural subject requires “do not clash.” There are also problems with capitalisation and sentence boundaries, such as the lowercase “i” and the run-on sequence beginning “I am very poliete…” followed by several connected ideas. Practise accurate present and past forms, subject–verb agreement, and punctuation, then vary sentence structures while keeping each sentence clear.

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