Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter in response of your advertisement which I read in Australian magazine. You want a care taker for your child.

I am in searching for a job nowadays. I want to go abroad for this purpose, I like this job because its complete my desires also its about my acdamic line.

I want to tell you that I am eligible for this job because I have recently completed my internship at hospital about take care of children. Thus i have good exprience about children. I perform this job in a beneficial way.

Actually I am also good care taker of home. In my free time I will do household chores and can give you oppurtunity of grocery. I am multi talented person I always provide you different services. In my leisure time I can taught your child because I have experice of teaching during my internship.

I am glad if you will give me this opportunity. My documents are attached here. Thank you.

Yours faithfully,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the main purpose by applying for the childcare role and mentioning your hospital internship, household skills and possible activities with the child. However, the required points are only partly developed. The reason for wanting the job is unclear in “I want to go abroad for this purpose” and “it’s about my academic line”; explain how the position connects to your studies or goals. Your suitability needs concrete evidence, such as the duties you performed during the internship or how you cared for children. The free-time point is also not fully answered: household chores and grocery shopping are mainly services to the family, rather than your own plans for time in Australia. Add personal interests or places you hope to visit, while keeping the letter focused on the three prompts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a recognisable sequence: you introduce the advertisement, explain your interest, describe your experience, and close politely. Paragraph breaks help separate these stages, and linking words such as “Thus” and “Actually” show attempts to connect ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the move from wanting to go abroad to the job matching your academic line needs a clearer explanation. Several ideas are joined in long strings with commas, and “I am multi talented person” is followed by a broad claim about providing services without a clear link to your free-time plans. Organise the body around the three requested points and use clearer sentence boundaries and references to make the relationships between ideas easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “advertisement,” “internship,” “children,” and “leisure time,” so the reader can identify the topic and your intended role. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “care taker,” “in searching for a job,” “complete my desires,” and “give you oppurtunity of grocery.” Spelling errors including “acdamic,” “exprience,” and “oppurtunity” also reduce accuracy. Some phrases, such as “different services,” are too general to communicate your strengths precisely. Build a more natural set of expressions for childcare and employment, and choose specific wording—for example, describe your childcare experience and the activities you could undertake with the child.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the overall message is usually understandable. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence patterns and in attempts to join clauses. Examples include “I am in searching for a job,” “I like this job because its complete my desires,” and “I can taught your child.” There are also problems with articles, verb forms and punctuation, as in “I am multi talented person” and the comma splice in “I want to go abroad for this purpose, I like this job.” Practise accurate present and future forms, including “I can teach,” and separate complete ideas with full stops or suitable conjunctions. More reliable sentence control would make your application easier to read.

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