Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

Good day,

I am writing to you about the job you announced in the magazine, i would like to have the job because i love children and I konw how to dealing with them, also I have a plan to settle in Australia.

The reasons why I know how to dealing with them because i have brothers approxemately the same age of your child, I always take care of them, know what they need and how they are thinking and i know also that they are in a sensitive age, they are exploring life and they need aid.

I would spend my free time helping your child to learn more, and doing his school excercises, going for cycling if you allowed to. I also have online courses but I will make sure not to affect my job.

I'm looking forward to hearing from you,

kinds regard,

Zeinab Eissa

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the three requested points: you explain that you love children, describe caring for younger brothers, and mention activities such as helping the child with schoolwork and cycling. However, the reasons for wanting the position are only partly developed; “I have a plan to settle in Australia” is mentioned without explaining how the job fits that plan. Your suitability would be more convincing with specific examples of childcare responsibilities or relevant qualities, and the free-time section could clarify what you would do independently as well as with the child. The letter is relevant, but some ideas remain limited or unclear, so develop each point more fully and make your motivation explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter follows a broadly sensible order: you introduce your interest, explain your experience, and then describe free-time plans. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these points. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the long second paragraph, where several ideas are joined together with repeated “and” and “because.” The opening “Good day” and the closing are separated from the main message but do not contribute much to the organisation. Use clearer topic sentences and divide related details into shorter sentences. More precise links between your childcare experience and your suitability would also make the letter easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main ideas, with relevant expressions such as “take care of them,” “sensitive age,” and “online courses.” However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which makes parts of the letter less natural. For example, “how to dealing with them” and “school excercises” do not express your meaning accurately, while “aid” is less natural than a word such as “support” in this context. Spelling errors, including “konw,” “approxemately,” and “kinds regard,” are noticeable. Build a wider set of accurate childcare and employment expressions, and proofread spelling and phrase choices.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, but the range of structures is limited and errors recur, sometimes making the relationships between ideas harder to understand. For instance, “I know how to dealing with them” has an incorrect verb pattern, and “The reasons why I know how to dealing with them because…” is an incomplete and awkwardly constructed sentence. The sentence beginning “I would spend my free time…” also combines several activities without consistently clear structure. Capitalisation and punctuation need attention, including lowercase “i” and the comma splice in the opening paragraph. Practise accurate verb patterns and break complex ideas into complete, well-punctuated sentences.

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