Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

• explain why you would like the job
• give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
• say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you should be fine in this letter i told you that have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine so i would that this job this is a good opportuines for me that i work for Australian magazine for someone . they hire me beacuse of my good experince and my skills thats why they can hire me now am very exicted for this job to make my carrer better

after some i had this oppertunity so i cant give up take my work with honestly thats

make you proud on me

in australlia daily life is very busy but in free time i do some extra hours of work make money my

mission is to be a successful man so my parents proud on me i live with my family for six monthsand look after their six year old child. at end i thank you very much dear parents

your son

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You make an attempt to explain your interest, saying the job is a “good opportunity” and could help your career, and you mention caring for the family’s six-year-old child. However, the task’s key points are only minimally addressed: you give no concrete experience or skills that would make you suitable, and your free-time plan is unclear because you say you would do extra work rather than describe activities in Australia. The letter also includes an unsuitable closing, “your son,” for parents you do not know. The response is 148 words, so it falls two words short of the 150-word minimum. Develop each requested point with relevant details, especially childcare experience and realistic leisure plans.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0

There is a basic attempt to move from your interest in the job to your intentions and then to life in Australia, but the progression is difficult to follow. The opening combines several ideas in one long, unclear sentence, while “after some i had this oppertunity” does not clearly connect to what comes before. The paragraph breaks do not consistently separate the three requested points, and the final sentence shifts abruptly to thanking the parents. Linking words such as “so” are repeated without making the relationships between ideas clear. Organise the letter into distinct paragraphs—motivation, suitability, and free time—and use clear transitions and references so each point follows logically.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “advertisement,” “opportunity,” “experience,” “skills,” and “successful,” which helps communicate your general purpose. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “work for Australian magazine for someone,” “take my work with honestly,” and “make you proud on me.” Spelling errors, including “opportuines,” “beacuse,” and “australlia,” also reduce accuracy and polish. Aim for precise phrases suited to a formal application, such as describing your childcare experience and explaining how you would spend leisure time. Check spelling and learn common collocations rather than relying on repeated general words such as “job” and “work.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response attempts to form longer sentences, but control of sentence structure and punctuation is weak, and errors often make the meaning hard to follow. For example, “I hope you should be fine in this letter i told you that have seen” lacks a clear sentence structure and has problems with tense and clause formation. There are also missing subjects or verbs in “so i would that this job” and “now am very exicted,” as well as inconsistent capitalisation and sentence boundaries. Most ideas are expressed through loosely connected clauses rather than a controlled mix of sentence forms. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check tense, articles, punctuation, and capital letters before submitting.

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