Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, advancement of technology has made online shopping more popular among the youngsters. It is argued that increasing demand of online shopping will lead to permenantly close the stores in towns and urban areas. I partly agree with this statement, although online shopping is convenient and reliable, I believe stores provide a significant value to their customers.

On the one hand, online shopping has made people life more convenient and easier. This is mainly because people can shop from the app from anywhere without wasting their time in travelling to the store. Moreover, online shopping has some policies which are significantly beneficial for the individual such as return policy. For example, when people purchase items online from the app they would provide some discount on the product and also if they dislike the product on arrival or something is damaged they could return it.

On the other hand, in person shopping still provide satisfaction and trust to customers because not all the products people can purchase online. For Example, clothes and shoes. People would definitely go in person to buy clothes and shoes as they would be able to touch and feel the material of the cloth in store and choose according to their taste. Moreover, in store shopping has provide loyalty to the customers and also it encourage people to walk and enjoy shopping in leisure time.

In conclusion, although online shopping is convenient and easier, in person shopping still provide significant values such as trust and loyalty. Therefore, I partly agree with the statement that online shopping will permanently stops selling in stores.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you partly agree, while arguing that physical shops will continue to offer value. You address both sides with relevant points, including convenience, discounts and returns for online shopping, and the ability to feel clothing and footwear in stores. These examples support your view, but some ideas are asserted rather than fully explained. For instance, the claim that in-store shopping creates “loyalty” is not developed, and the response does not explain why these advantages mean shops will remain open rather than simply become less common. To strengthen the argument, explain the likely impact of each example and make your conclusion more precise about whether all shops could close.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs and a conclusion. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” make the shift between the benefits of online and in-person shopping easy to follow, and the examples generally appear in relevant places. This meets the lower-band expectations and shows some features of stronger progression. However, connections within paragraphs are sometimes mechanical, with repeated “Moreover” and “also,” and the relationship between the examples and the main claim could be made clearer. The conclusion repeats the central contrast but does not fully draw together the reasoning. Use a wider range of linking methods and make each paragraph’s main point explicit before developing it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “online shopping,” “return policy,” “customers,” and “material.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions such as “significant value” and “in person shopping.” However, noticeable spelling, word-form and collocation problems reduce precision: “permenantly” is misspelled, “people life” is unnatural, and “provide loyalty” does not express the intended idea clearly. Some wording is also repetitive, particularly “online shopping” and “shopping.” Build accuracy with common collocations and vary repeated terms—for example, use “physical retailers” or “brick-and-mortar shops” where appropriate. Check spelling and whether each chosen phrase conveys the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a reason clause in “This is mainly because…” and a conditional example beginning “if they dislike the product.” The overall meaning is usually understandable, but some grammatical errors occur across the response. Examples include subject–verb agreement in “in person shopping still provide” and “it encourage,” and the incorrect verb pattern in “will permanently stops selling.” There are also problems with articles and sentence boundaries, such as the comma splice joining “I partly agree” to “although online shopping is convenient.” Review agreement, verb forms and punctuation, and separate or correctly join clauses. More accurate control of these patterns would make your varied sentences clearer.

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