Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I am totally disagree with this statement.

Firstly, Online shopping is very cruical part in our culture. Because, it saves a lot of time in their busy schedule. Most of the people prefer online shopping through different apps like shein, amazon, flipkart and so on. It is beneficial for all. People do not go outside to get thing from one shop to another shop. It spend a lot of time. They tap the one finger and order their things.

While, the other hand, online shopping is a big scam with the people. People add their cards on their sites and use for shopping. But when their phones would be lost or happening at the point, it will be risky for them, Furthermore, if they go to the shop and buy things accprding to their preference. It would be benefit for them. They can check the quality and quantitative of the things. It would not be headache that to exchange the things. while the online shoping does not have a return option on some time. So, it would lost the money and people do not get the things which they see in the pictures.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear disagreement in the opening and offer relevant reasons: online shopping saves time, while physical shops let customers inspect products and may make returns easier. These points address the topic, but the response develops them only briefly and does not fully explain whether online shopping could replace every kind of town or city shop. The security concern is also unclear: “when their phones would be lost or happening at the point” does not explain the risk, and the discussion shifts between advantages of online and in-person shopping without firmly linking them to your position. The response is 193 words, below the required 250, so there is not enough space to develop and support the argument. Add specific examples and explain why physical shops will continue to be needed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: the first body paragraph presents benefits of online shopping, and the second contrasts these with advantages of physical shops. The opening also makes your position easy to identify. However, progression is limited because several points are listed rather than connected and explained. The transition “While, the other hand” is inaccurate, and “Furthermore” introduces another point without clarifying how it relates to the security concern. Some references, such as “It” in “It spend a lot of time,” are unclear, while repeated use of “people” and “shop” makes the writing feel repetitive. Use clear topic sentences, connect each example to your argument, and choose linking phrases that accurately show contrast or addition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “online shopping,” “quality,” “preference,” “return option,” and “scam.” Some wording also shows an attempt to express specific concerns about convenience, security, and product inspection. However, the range is limited and several choices or spellings make the meaning less precise: “cruical part,” “quantitative of the things,” and “shoping” are examples. Phrases such as “They tap the one finger” and “It would not be headache” are not natural collocations, and “big scam with the people” does not clearly express the intended point. Build accuracy by learning common word partnerships for shopping, payment security, product quality, and returns, and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences with reasons, and the main position is generally understandable. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “I am totally disagree” uses an incorrect verb pattern, while “Because, it saves a lot of time in their busy schedule” is a fragment with unclear pronoun reference. “It spend a lot of time” has an agreement error, and “when their phones would be lost or happening at the point” has faulty verb construction. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, including “Firstly, Online” and comma use after “Because.” Practise complete sentences, subject–verb agreement, and clear conditional structures, then proofread for sentence boundaries.

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