Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays,it is becoming concern that growing trend of online shopping will leads to close all the cities and towns one day. However, I agree that this trend is increasing day by day and almost all the individuals choose this trend rather than going in person but not all shops of cities and towns will be closed by following this particular trend.

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing because of the convenience of online shopping. while sitting at home, individuals can order online because there are so many e-commerce sites which gives heavy discounts to them. As a result, they attracts from them and buy online rather than wasting their time to go outside.

Due to environmental issues like taffic congestion majority of people love to do online shopping. An increasing numbers of vehicles in the towns and cities, traffic is increasing day by day. People have to wait in a long line up in front of shopping malls for parking as well as in the shops . Therefore, sometimes due to heavy demands of products, it is not available in person but could be available online.

On the downside, this trend is not followed by those who wants to go in the shops and check the quality of products as compared to shop it online. while shopping in the shops gives people internal satisfaction. Hence, it is all their personal perefernce and depend on the type of store.

To conclude, all shops in cities and towns will not close because of growth in online shopping . It depends on the shopping habits of the person that what kind of thing they buy and iis ir required to do in person visit and online.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you disagree that online shopping will close every town and city shop. You address both sides by explaining the convenience and discounts of online shopping, then noting that some customers prefer to inspect products in person. These relevant points meet the task well, and the conclusion returns to your view. The response also gives some explanation, such as how traffic and parking can make in-person shopping less appealing. However, the environmental point is not fully connected to the claim, and the final idea about shopping habits and product types remains vague. To strengthen the response further, develop each reason with a specific example and explain more directly why physical shops will continue to serve customers.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two paragraphs supporting the growth of online shopping, a counterpoint, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “As a result,” “Therefore,” and “On the downside” help show relationships between ideas. However, the progression is sometimes mechanical, and the second body paragraph’s discussion of traffic, parking, and product availability does not form a fully clear chain of reasoning. Some references are also unclear, as in “they attracts from them,” which makes it difficult to identify what “they” and “them” refer to. Improve cohesion by making each paragraph’s main point explicit, using pronouns only when their reference is unmistakable, and linking examples directly to the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “e-commerce sites,” “heavy discounts,” “traffic congestion,” and “personal preference.” This gives you enough range to discuss online and in-person shopping, and the main meaning is generally understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “they attracts from them,” “heavy demands of products,” and “internal satisfaction.” There are also spelling errors, including “taffic” and “perefernce,” which reduce the accuracy of the writing. Aim for more natural combinations and check spelling carefully. For example, you could describe customers as “attracted by discounts,” refer to “high demand for products,” and say that browsing in person provides “a sense of satisfaction.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a contrast introduced by “On the downside.” These structures help you express causes and opposing views, and the overall message can usually be followed. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction are noticeable. For example, “will leads” should use the base form after “will,” while “which gives” does not agree with the plural “sites.” The opening sentence also has a faulty construction, and the final sentence is difficult to parse. Capitalisation and spacing around punctuation are inconsistent. Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject and verb, correct agreement, and a complete, logically connected structure.

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