Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

I agree that onlline shopping will lead to closing all the shops in the town and cities. Technology has took over most of the jobs in factories and many other places where the persons job mainly consists of repetition and predicted work.

People these days are not that much physically active, people mostly like things get done while their in their home and would'nt have to go out and hassle and get it done, They think if they go out they would get stuck in traffic for hours, they might run into some disaster like getting a flat tyre or getting their car to stop on the way because of poor maintanence and some people are just to lazy to get up from the screen infront of them and go do shopping physically. People just sit on their couches and take a few minutes to look up things online and order them, it does have a plus point that it saves a lot of time and is easier to shop online as you have all the things lined up infront of you rather than going to the shop and look at every aisle indivisually, Most shops have already shifted their stores to online so that they could work with the on-going trends.

I work late mostly and all the stores close at 10 in the night, and I'm usually late to get the daily groceries and have to go home empty handed, then a friend told me that I could order groceries online. I sat right there in my office and ordered all the groceries online and after work i went straight to home and all the groceries were already there.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear from the opening: you agree that online shopping will cause physical shops to close. You give relevant support, including the convenience of ordering from home and your experience of buying groceries online after shops had closed. However, the response only partly develops the task’s central claim. It explains why online shopping is attractive, but does not show convincingly why this would lead to *all* shops closing; some shops may offer services or experiences that online retailers cannot. The point about technology replacing repetitive factory jobs is also not clearly connected to the future of town and city shops. To strengthen the response, address the absolute claim directly and develop a counterpoint or qualification before explaining why you still agree.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable progression from your opinion, to reasons for online shopping, and then to a personal example. The final anecdote is relevant and helps illustrate convenience. However, most of the reasoning is packed into one very long paragraph, so the reader has to work to distinguish separate points. The second paragraph also moves through traffic, car problems, laziness, product choice, and shops moving online without clear links between each idea. Repeated use of “people” and “and” makes the connections feel mechanical, while the personal example would be clearer as a separate paragraph. Organise the essay into distinct stages and use precise transitions to show how each reason supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including phrases such as “physically active,” “daily groceries,” and “on-going trends.” There are also attempts to express specific situations, such as being “stuck in traffic” or ordering groceries online. However, the range is limited in places and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or informal, including “predicted work,” “get it done,” and “all the things lined up infront of you.” Spelling errors such as “onlline,” “maintanence,” and “indivisually” are noticeable and reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise language about consumer convenience and the effects on local businesses, and proofread spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons and examples, but control is inconsistent. Several sentences run together, particularly the long sentence beginning “People these days are not that much physically active,” where multiple ideas are joined without reliable punctuation. There are also frequent errors in verb forms and sentence construction, such as “Technology has took over” and “people mostly like things get done.” The anecdote shifts between past and present forms (“I sat” and “i went”), and apostrophes and capitalisation are not consistently controlled. These errors sometimes make the reader pause, even though the overall meaning remains understandable. Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with accurate verb forms and punctuation.

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