Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The booming online shopping culture will end the existance of physical outlets in the cities in the coming time. I disagree with the statement because I think the offline market will exist as customer values the experience and mostly like to try before purchasing.

The online services made an impact in the recent time and that directly effect the old school markets. It cahnged the way of availing products and services. There are quick delivery applications for buying clothes, ordering food that served the customer at their doorsteps. The websites like uber eats, for example, leads to the habit of ordering food at home rather than going out to eat. Hence, the big name restaurants are closing and preferring cloud kitchens for the business.

However, there are shops like barber's, tailor's and beauty parlours that are uneffected and always need the presence of customer at their p

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

Your position is clear from the opening: you disagree because customers value the in-person experience and want to try products. You also give relevant examples, including food-delivery services and businesses such as barbers and tailors. However, the response addresses the question only partially: the restaurant example mainly explains how online services affect businesses, rather than showing whether all town and city shops will close. The final point is unfinished, and there is little explanation of why physical shops will continue to attract customers. The response is also below the required 250 words. Develop both sides of your reasoning, add specific supporting examples, and finish with a clear conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph about online services, and a contrasting paragraph beginning with “However.” This gives the reader a basic sense of direction, and examples are generally placed near the points they support. However, the progression is limited because the second paragraph focuses on restaurants and cloud kitchens, while the next paragraph starts a different argument but ends abruptly at “at their p”. The relationship between these examples and your overall disagreement needs to be made clearer. Use separate, fully developed paragraphs for the effects of online shopping and the reasons physical shops will remain, with linking phrases that show how each point supports your position. A complete conclusion would also help the response feel finished.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “online shopping culture,” “physical outlets,” “delivery applications,” and “cloud kitchens,” which helps communicate the subject. There is also an attempt to use more specific examples rather than relying only on general statements. However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce accuracy, such as “existance,” “cahnged,” and “uneffected.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, including “in the coming time,” “old school markets,” and “big name restaurants.” Choose more conventional collocations, such as “in the future,” “traditional shops,” and “well-known restaurants.” Expanding the vocabulary for customer preferences and the role of physical stores would also help you explain your argument more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, for example, “I disagree with the statement because I think…” and “Hence, the big name restaurants are closing and preferring cloud kitchens for the business.” The main ideas are usually understandable, but grammatical control is uneven. In “as customer values,” the subject needs an appropriate plural form or article, and “that directly effect” has a subject–verb agreement problem. The sentence about restaurants also combines actions in a way that makes the relationship between them unclear. The final sentence is incomplete, so it cannot show accurate control of a full clause. Practise checking agreement, verb forms, and sentence completion, and use a wider range of structures while keeping each sentence clear.

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