Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In the modern era, people taken use online shopping increase these days also many shops in towns and city less people buy many products.While have use many websites and app due to use online shopping there are many posotive views another thinks not totally closed shops in future. This essay will discuss more benefits for online shopping and less benefits small shops in towns and cities areas.
On the one hand, There are many perspective available for why people used online shopping this days.Firstly,Online process they are very esay and fast another thinks many choices selected during buy any products.Secondly,Multifarious app and websites they are provide many schemes like offer,discounts, buy one get one free and many another new offer available during buy products and items in shopping online platforms.For Instance, In our country many shopping app and websites provided more gift money that's way various people use those type of platforms.
On the other hand, They taken less facilities some small shops they are lack of choice products.Therefore,many time people face problems buy products or items shops there are lack of brands and old productions.Furthermore,They got small price limited and lack of quality items because of local people buy those products and items.
In conclusion,although when are most impotant in life quality of products or items use because of health it is must priority in life. Moreover,these days more developing in technology due to online selling any products. another thinks they can small shops try to update there selling schemes because of more people attracted buy items small shops.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both online shopping and the future of physical shops. However, the position is not clearly stated or maintained throughout the essay. While the introduction mentions both sides, the conclusion is vague and does not explicitly state whether you agree or disagree with the prompt. The ideas are present but remain under-developed; for example, the points about 'lack of choice' and 'old productions' in local shops are mentioned but not fully explained or supported with clear logic. To improve, ensure you take a firm stance in the introduction and provide more detailed, logical support for each of your main arguments in the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often unclear due to awkward phrasing and a lack of logical flow between sentences. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Firstly' and 'On the other hand', but they are often applied mechanically or incorrectly, such as 'another thinks' used as a transition. Referencing is sometimes confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. To improve, focus on using linking words more naturally and ensure that each sentence logically follows the one before it to create a smoother, more coherent argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'products', 'items', and 'shops'. There are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'people taken use online shopping' and 'they got small price limited'. These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas clearly. To improve, try to incorporate more precise synonyms and learn common collocations related to business and technology, such as 'consumer behavior', 'brick-and-mortar stores', or 'competitive pricing', rather than relying on generic phrases.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper grammatical construction, such as 'In the modern era, people taken use online shopping increase these days'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors present often impede the clarity of the message. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions. Proofreading for basic errors like 'there' vs 'their' and ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb will significantly improve your score.
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