Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Through different forms of print and digital media, we come across reports that, Nowadays growing online shopping trend will be affecting on shops and small outlet, which leads to closing soon in future. This has resulted into multiple controversies. After a scrutiny of debates, I completely accede.

My inclination can be bolstered with interesting observations. To begin with, In online shopping have various choice for selections. This view exists as customer get wide range of products with best qualities and quantities. As a result, consumer mostly buy products likewise, cloths, food products, accessories an even electronics items. In addition to this, it is said that e-shopping is time saving procedure.As a matter of fact, we are ordering any item in our home and any place and delivered at home stay in certain times. Therefore, It is reducing our transportation time and provide good thing in shorter period such as, Nowadays blinkit, swiggy, zomato which app delivered food and grocery items quickly.

Not only these, Virtual shopping gives best policies for each and every products. Generally speaking, they provide easy to get and return services. And also get refund for faulty items which customer get in their order or they also replace item if consumer want to do. So that's the main reason to online shopping build customer's trust

and always follow discipline.

In a nutshell, down the lane, virtual shopping have trustworthy for most people. It is recommended that all shops in towns and cities both are maintain these types of services in present and future, if they win trust of community.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention variety, time-saving, and return policies as reasons for the decline of physical shops, these points are not fully extended or supported with deep analysis. The conclusion is a bit abrupt and slightly shifts the focus to advice for physical shops rather than summarizing the main argument. To improve, ensure each body paragraph explores the 'why' and 'how' more thoroughly, providing a more robust logical flow that directly supports your initial stance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'My inclination can be bolstered with' or 'Not only these'. Some transitions between sentences feel abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the link between the general argument and the specific examples (Blinkit, Swiggy) could be smoother. Improving the variety and precision of your linking words will help the flow of your arguments significantly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'scrutiny', 'controversies', and 'inclination'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'accede' (which is usually used for requests or demands rather than opinions), 'time saving procedure', and 'good thing in shorter period'. Some phrasing is repetitive, and the vocabulary lacks the precision required for higher bands. Focusing on learning collocations—words that naturally go together—will help you express your ideas more naturally and accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's flow. Examples include 'Nowadays growing online shopping trend will be affecting on shops', 'In online shopping have various choice', and 'virtual shopping have trustworthy'. Issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and prepositional phrases are consistent throughout the text. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Prioritize proofreading for basic grammar rules, specifically verb forms and pluralization.

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