Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In this modern era, online shopping is growing day by day which will one day leads to close all the shops in towns and cities. I am fully agree with this statement.

First of all, online shopping is really a easy way to shop anything, anytime and anywhere for all ages of people, this is why shops are getting lower customers from past. Secondly, people can do online shopping at their home while sitting and do not need to go anywhere to buy things which is why the shopping from stores are becoming less popular.

Moreover, there are a lot of discounts and offers are available when people are doing online shopping rather than in-store, so this is also the reason for growing popularity for online shopping. Also, when people do online shopping they can get all the things delivered to their homes, which saves their a lot of time, that is way they more likely to prefer doing online shopping rather than going in-store for shopping.

Furthermore, while doing online shopping, if people want to return or refund any item, they can do it so easily as compare to in-stores, this is the reason why online shopping is growing rapidly now as compare to past. In addition, they can get refunds or returns within a few hours, however, in stores, sometimes they do not prefer to give any refund or return for such items.

In conclusion, the online shopping is growing nowadays and the shops in cities and towns will shut down one day due to this.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive. While you provide reasons for the growth of online shopping, such as convenience and discounts, the argument that all physical shops will close is a strong claim that requires more nuanced exploration or counter-argument to reach a higher band. The ideas are relevant but could be extended with more specific examples or a deeper analysis of why some physical stores might survive (e.g., experiential retail or immediate needs).

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use basic cohesive devices like 'First of all', 'Secondly', 'Moreover', and 'Furthermore' to link your points. However, the use of these devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. Additionally, some sentences are slightly disjointed, such as '...for all ages of people, this is why shops are getting lower customers from past.' Improving the flow between sentences and using a wider variety of linking words would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on simple phrases like 'really a easy way', 'do not need to go anywhere', and 'getting lower customers'. There is some repetition of basic terms like 'online shopping' and 'shops'. To improve, you should aim to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to commerce and consumer behavior. For instance, instead of 'getting lower customers', you could use 'experiencing a decline in foot traffic'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'I am fully agree' (should be 'I fully agree'), 'leads to close all the shops' (should be 'leads to the closure of all shops'), and 'saves their a lot of time'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are noticeable and occur in simple sentence structures. You should focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and sentence construction to improve your accuracy.

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