Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
No doubt, online shopping is progressively becoming popular. One day, the continue of online shopping will shut down all the stores in cities and towns. I am agreement with this notion, and the related facts will be discussed in upcoming paragraphs.
To commence with, most of the shops in markets will be closed due to the online shopping as the product is delivered to the customers door. More specifically, if people buy something online, there is no need to visit the shop as they get their parcels at home within one or two days. For example, many online shopping apps such as Amazon, Temu and Daraz have the fasted delivery option that allows customer to get the product within a day. As a result, going to a shop to purchase something will not be required, so less number of visitors will lead to the closing of all shops permanently.
Furthermore, e-commerce websites will have replaced physical shops since buying things by e-shopping is much more convenient and time-saving. To be precise, since a person can easily place an order with just by few clicks on a mobile phone, it does not take too much time and there is no need to put hard effort into finding good things. For instance, filters available on almost every online shopping website or app make it easier to find suitable products without spending a lot of time. As a result, people will prefer to place orders in a few minutes on their mobile instead of heading physically to the shops.
To conclude, e-shopping will have a profound impacts on shopping by visiting the market physically, therefore shops in the country will disappear one day because people will not want to go to shopping stores as they will choose to shop through the Internet which is not only easy to use and time-efficient but also provides home delivery.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response addresses the prompt clearly and maintains a consistent position throughout. You have provided relevant arguments regarding convenience, time-saving, and delivery services to support your view. However, the development is somewhat repetitive; both body paragraphs focus heavily on the same points (convenience and delivery speed). To reach a higher band, you should aim to explore the counter-argument or discuss the limitations of online shopping (e.g., the social aspect of physical stores or the inability to try on clothes) to provide a more balanced and nuanced discussion. The conclusion effectively summarizes your position.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'Furthermore', and 'As a result' to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and there are minor issues with referencing and flow. For instance, 'the continue of online shopping' in the introduction is awkward and disrupts the cohesion. Paragraphing is used appropriately, and each paragraph has a clear central topic, which helps the reader follow your argument without difficulty.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'e-commerce', 'profound impacts', and 'time-efficient'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'I am agreement with this notion' (should be 'I am in agreement') and 'the fasted delivery' (should be 'the fastest delivery'). Some collocations are also slightly unnatural, such as 'put hard effort into finding'. While these errors do not impede communication, they limit the score. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise academic collocations would improve your performance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'the continue of online shopping' (noun/verb confusion), 'less number of visitors' (should be 'a smaller number of visitors'), and 'with just by few clicks' (preposition error). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but there are minor slips throughout. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. The majority of your sentences are understandable, but the frequency of these small errors prevents a higher score.
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