Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays, the development of online shopping increased day by day as a result one day all local shop in town and cities closing.
Firstly, all age of the people are more focus on where they get best deal on any kind of the product they want to purchase. Moreover, e-commerce website like amazon give more discount as compared to the local shops. As a result the online shopping has increased now days. In the market their are many other competitor available to give more discount but they have certain limitation on it. At the end local shop has to closed in future.
There are many advantages of doing online shopping people get more discount and the online website give free delivery option. Due to this customer can save their money as well save their time. For instance, customer want to purchase any electronic device they no need to any shop they can read a review online and also watch a product full detail with the use of an advance technology such as artificial intelligence. Therefore, people no need to go anywhere in local shop. On festival time online shopping give more and more discount on their product so every one is going to do shopping online as result.
The online shopping give more option like customer can see the price of product and compare with other site. It will allows to watch the video of particular product and check before purchasing it.
In conclusion, I am totally agree with this statement because the demand of online shopping has increased now a days and give more discount on their product as a result the local shop lead to close in near future.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in agreement with the statement. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention discounts and convenience as reasons for the decline of local shops, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, you mention 'discounts' in almost every paragraph without exploring other factors like the social value of local shops or the limitations of online shopping (e.g., lack of physical interaction or delivery delays). To improve, you should provide more nuanced examples and ensure each paragraph introduces a distinct, well-supported point rather than restating the same idea.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often hindered by repetitive phrasing and a lack of sophisticated cohesive devices. While you use some transition words like 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion', the connections between sentences are often mechanical. Some sentences are disjointed, making the progression of ideas feel somewhat circular. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence builds logically upon the previous one, rather than simply repeating the main argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use simple terms like 'good', 'discount', and 'shop'. There are also issues with word forms and collocations, such as 'all age of the people' instead of 'people of all ages' and 'local shop has to closed' instead of 'local shops will have to close'. To improve, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to commerce and technology, and pay closer attention to the correct grammatical form of the words you choose.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('local shop has to closed'), missing articles, and incorrect verb tenses ('the development of online shopping increased'). There is a limited range of complex sentence structures, and many sentences are simple or contain structural errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Practising the use of complex sentences with subordinate clauses will also help demonstrate a wider grammatical range.
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