Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Currently, people are buying their stuff online rather than visiting outlets in their towns or cities. But it does not ending with shutting down the all shops. As some of individual still like to do offline shopping. I am not totally agree with this statement and i would like to share my thoughts regarding this topic.

first, i would like to answer about online shopping. Personally, i am the person who like to purchase many of stuff via online applications as i believed it can save our money and also control our extra purchases. Moreover, companies are giving their best to catching audience attention as well as they are offering some unique deals and BOGO offers many more.

However, according to me offline shopping is a better because we can check the quality of the product very well even we can barganning with shopkeeper about the prices so it can save our cost sometime. Further more, we can spend our valuable time with our loved once during the shopping and it can lead to give a chance about knowing the pwrson well about their choices. Especially for an atire i would always prefer offline shopping insted of online.It can give me clear idea about how the particular cloth looks on me like the fitting , color combination and looks.

In conclusion, i belived online shopping is booming now a days but that can not means people will not go for the store and local markets.i believed local market have their own speciality so i do not think shops will shutting down in cities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear disagreement with the statement. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide reasons for preferring offline shopping, such as checking quality and social interaction, these points could be expanded with more specific examples or deeper analysis to reach a higher band. The position is consistent throughout, but the conclusion is slightly repetitive. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a distinct, well-supported argument rather than listing multiple points briefly. The response covers all parts of the task, but the depth of argumentation is currently at a basic level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'However', and 'In conclusion' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as 'Further more' and 'But that can not means'. Additionally, some sentences are disjointed, and the flow between ideas could be smoother. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that pronouns and references are used accurately to connect sentences more naturally throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to express your opinions clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'online applications', 'deals', and 'local markets'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'do not ending with shutting down the all shops', 'barganning', and 'atire'. These errors occasionally distract the reader. To achieve a higher score, work on using more precise collocations and ensure you are using the correct word forms. Expanding your range to include more sophisticated vocabulary related to commerce and consumer habits would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('some of individual still like'), tense usage ('it does not ending'), and article usage ('the all shops'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of capital letters and spacing after periods. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors would significantly improve your accuracy.

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