Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this concurrent world, it is undoubtedly true that online shopping promote your brand and most of people know the product on social media. Some people concur that online shopping is time but some time they find fake products through online. So they prefer to go to shops than online However, I quibble from them and propound that all shopping malls and shops will be closed in cities because online shopping is very time consuming.
Adequate evidences are obtainable to substantiate that The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. The top notch concrete reason is due to busy routine people preferred the online shopping. Another rationale which hauls me to patron is due to highest rate of petrol people preferences in online shopping . The rearmost concrete factor to be considered which can not be neglected is that shortage of parking spaces people suffer a lot and they buy online. Everything is available online page . To uphold my notion I would quote an instance which is prima facie testimony. Last day I go to shopping mall with my kid but I am stuck in traffic jam and there is no parking space.
Thus, it is clear that online shopping lead to all shops in cities are closed.
What is half full for some, may appear half empty to others. So the public in general tend to be distinguish that sometime online shopping is fake and we don't sure about the actual product. we all are busy in daily routine and don't have time to go to shops. So we ordered the products online To commence with some people believe that everything is available in one page we did shopping in just 10 minutes. To illustrate I ordered a red coat in small size by online but when I received it I did not fit in this size.
In recapitulation I reiterate that there are innumerable strong factors supporting he growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing . However its contrary can be overlooked or controlled. In conclusion I firmly agree to the given statement.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position, but the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you provide reasons such as traffic, parking, and convenience, the arguments are often repetitive and lack depth. The essay structure is somewhat disjointed, as you introduce counter-arguments in a confusing manner, making it difficult to follow your line of reasoning. Some points, such as the mention of 'fake products,' are not fully integrated into your argument. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea that directly supports your thesis, and avoid repeating the same points in different sections of the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward transitions and confusing sentence structures. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inappropriate, such as 'The rearmost concrete factor' or 'To uphold my notion.' Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the progression of ideas is not always smooth. For example, the transition between the discussion of online shopping benefits and the counter-argument is abrupt. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
You attempt to use a wide range of vocabulary, but many word choices are unnatural or incorrect in context. Phrases like 'concurrent world,' 'hauls me to patron,' and 'rearmost concrete factor' indicate a misunderstanding of collocation and register. There are also frequent errors in word formation and usage, such as 'don't sure' and 'did not fit in this size.' While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and the misuse of academic-sounding vocabulary limit your score. Focus on using simpler, more accurate vocabulary rather than attempting complex words that you are not fully comfortable with.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('online shopping promote'), tense inconsistencies ('Last day I go'), and awkward sentence construction. While you attempt complex sentences, they are often faulty, which can impede the reader's understanding. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect capitalization. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on basic sentence structure and ensure that your verb tenses are consistent throughout the text. Proofreading for common errors like articles and pluralization would also be highly beneficial.
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