Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The world is moving into technology, that is while most business are upgrading into digital marketing, which i agree that the online marketing will expand to more towns and cities , which will affect the physical shopping.
Firstly, most business have engage on the online visibility, by posting there brand on every online platform also creating relatable content to convinced people to buy their product for instance, people posting and marketing their product on platform like Facebook, instagram. Where customer review and purchase there product faster than waiting in your physical store till someone comes to purchase.
Secondly, it saves time you can order anything online and it will be delivery to you, very fast and also less stress for instance, you are in the hospital and you need some basic item , instead of going to the shopping mall , you can request it online and it will be deliver to you.
Furthermore, most company are now going to online marketing because it makes their product are been showed to people between or outside their town or cities,making them achieve their goals .
In conclusion, with the fast development the online shopping will affect the shops in town and cities .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you address the topic of online shopping, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient depth. You state your position, but the supporting points—such as convenience and marketing reach—are presented in a very brief manner. To achieve a higher band, you must expand on your points with more detailed explanations and specific examples. The conclusion is also very brief and does not effectively summarize the main points or provide a final thought on the future of physical retail.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Furthermore' to signal the progression of your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the connection between ideas could be smoother. For example, the transition from discussing online marketing to the benefits of delivery is abrupt. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'most business have engage on the online visibility', where the link between the subject and the action is weak. Improving the variety of linking words would enhance the overall flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'online marketing', 'shopping', and 'business'. There are also several word-choice errors, such as 'delivery to you' (should be 'delivered') and 'product are been showed' (should be 'products are being shown'). These errors occasionally hinder the clarity of your message. To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to the retail industry, such as 'e-commerce', 'consumer behavior', 'brick-and-mortar stores', and 'market penetration'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There is a high frequency of grammatical errors throughout the text, which often impedes communication. You struggle with subject-verb agreement ('most business have engage'), tense consistency, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, such as the opening sentence which is a long, fragmented clause. You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'where customer review and purchase there product faster'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb forms, and using appropriate articles and prepositions.
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