Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
in this internet world where people are buying more stuff online instead of visiting stores. among the young people it is a favorite activity while surffing on internet. As repotedly people claiming that due to online shopping people one day avoiding to shop offline and due to that all shops will lock oneday. In my opinion I totally disagree. I will discuss this int his essay.
young people love to do internet surfing and due to that trend in online shopping is increased. Firstly, Lets understand that most of the online shopping sites are selling local sellers goods. due to this local sellers have chance to sell products in different regions. secondly, online platforms just charge them for internet fee and arrange shipping for them. Ergo, we can say that offline businesses are doing businesses online.
Online shopping will impact on offline businesses by some extant. Moreover, many local businesses are report that they are experiencing hard time in business due to online shopping. moreover, online shopping cuts the middleman commission and they offer it on discounted rates. Furthermore, small local shops and business which are not doing any online business they are struggling for sure. However, all the shops can not be shut down because many people are still like to do shopping physically specially with electronic items and clothes. Hence, people are love to do shopping offline in some special items.
To recapitulate above said points, As consumers demand and they like to buy things after physically inspect and many local shops are selling goods online which in this scenario town shops will never be fully shutdown. in my opinion, online business will impact on local shops but don't have power to close all the local shops.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The essay addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention that local shops are adapting by selling online and that consumers prefer physical inspection for certain items, these points are not fully extended with concrete examples or deeper analysis. The introduction is slightly repetitive, and some arguments, such as the claim that online shopping 'cuts the middleman commission,' are stated but not clearly linked to the broader argument about the survival of physical shops. To improve, focus on providing more detailed explanations and specific examples to support your claims.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'Ergo' is used in a context that feels unnatural, and the transition 'Moreover' is used twice in the same paragraph. There are also issues with sentence-level cohesion, such as 'As repotedly people claiming that due to online shopping people one day avoiding to shop offline.' The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by these awkward transitions and grammatical slips, making the flow feel disjointed at times.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on simple, repetitive phrasing such as 'doing businesses' and 'shopping offline.' There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'surffing', 'repotedly', 'extant') and word choice issues, such as 'all shops will lock oneday' instead of 'close down.' While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated vocabulary and the presence of errors in basic word forms limit the score. Expanding your range of collocations and synonyms would significantly enhance your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there is a high frequency of grammatical errors. Frequent issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many local businesses are report'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'people are still like to do shopping'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and misused commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader and indicate a lack of control over complex structures. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be beneficial.
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