Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
No I don’t agree with the statement saying that, the growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.Because, online shopping is not the only choice of all people, rather there are people who prefer offline shopping over online shopping too. This all depends on their flexibility and time preference.
Online shopping is easier and time saving but sometimes the quality is not up to the mark.We do online orders for faster deliveries but in peak occasions of festivals due to heavy orders, even our order gets delayed. Sometimes, even the color and material feels different from online orders. Also, there are certain scam too going on with online orders, where the products are fake.
Instead, in offline shopping the time goes but the shopping experience gives you the perfect things you wanted to buy. The quality of the material or thing bought is also the best. We can touch and feel the material which is not possible in online shopping. Also, the best thing of offline shopping is bargaining and buying the products on our demands. Yes, and how can we miss the fun and joy spend while offline shopping which makes memories.
So, as per my opinion, online shopping will not lead to closure of offline stores at all. As both of these has its own genre of people following it. And off-course it’s all the matter of time and flexibility option the customer prefer according to his or her preferences and needs.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by clearly stating a position against the idea that all physical shops will close. The ideas are relevant, focusing on the tactile experience of offline shopping and the limitations of online retail, such as quality issues and delivery delays. However, the development is somewhat limited. While the arguments are clear, they could be extended with more sophisticated examples or a deeper analysis of how businesses might adapt (e.g., omnichannel retail). The response is just over the minimum length, which restricts the depth of the discussion. To reach a higher band, you should aim to provide more nuanced arguments that explore the future of retail beyond just personal preference.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Also', 'Instead', and 'So' to link ideas. However, the transition between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the flow could be improved with more varied linking words or phrases. For instance, the opening paragraph is a bit abrupt. Using more sophisticated cohesive devices (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'Conversely', 'Consequently') would improve the logical flow. Additionally, some sentences are short and choppy, which affects the overall coherence. Focusing on creating smoother transitions between your points will help elevate your score.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your meaning clearly, such as 'flexibility', 'bargaining', and 'deliveries'. However, the vocabulary is somewhat repetitive and lacks the precision required for higher bands. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'scam too going on' and 'fun and joy spend'. To improve, try to incorporate more academic or topic-specific collocations related to economics or consumer behavior. Using more precise synonyms for common words will demonstrate a wider range and better control over your lexical choices.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. For example, 'No I don’t agree with the statement saying that, the growth...' contains punctuation errors and awkward phrasing. You also have issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'there are certain scam too' and 'as both of these has its own genre'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to limit the score. Focusing on sentence variety and proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy will be beneficial.
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