Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
every one knows that today is the Globalization era ,in this era everyone are using smartphones ,laptops and electronic Guadets. Through this no one have a time to go and visit shop to shop with this online shopping is to much famous between the peoples.
according to me i am agree with this statement , In this generation every person are to busy in her day to day life so every person are prefer to go window shopping instead to go outside and visit stores and buy from the shops .the theory is that every people is stuck in rat race they spent more time in the offices and in work and after that rest of the time they prefer to spent with her family members .According to me this is the main reason why most of the people spent time in online shopping prefer to go out side and do offline shopping .
Through this the shops in towns and cities are in losses in her business and for this those people who are using online shopping they mostly not satisfying with her online deals . sometimes they can buy useless things .after that they regret to spent money in online shopping .
so according to me i prefer to go offline shopping , through this we can go to the shop and firstly we can check the product and compare the price with other shops and buy the best product for us. this is the difference between online and offline shopping
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by taking a position, but the development is inconsistent. While you argue that online shopping will not replace physical stores, the reasoning is somewhat repetitive and lacks depth. You mention the 'rat race' and the desire to compare products as reasons for preferring offline shopping, but these points are not fully explored or supported with concrete examples. The argument is also slightly contradictory, as you initially agree with the statement but then conclude by advocating for offline shopping. To improve, ensure your position is consistent throughout and provide more detailed, logical explanations for your claims.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often disrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of effective cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are frequently missing or mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'Through this' and 'According to me'. The progression of ideas is not always clear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'on the other hand') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates directly to your main argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which occasionally hinders communication. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'Guadets' (gadgets), 'to much famous' (very popular), and 'in her business' (referring to shops). You rely on basic, repetitive vocabulary, which prevents you from expressing your ideas with precision. To reach a higher band, you should work on expanding your range of vocabulary, focusing on collocations and more sophisticated terms related to commerce and technology, and paying closer attention to spelling and word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'everyone are', 'every person are to busy'), pronoun usage (e.g., 'in her day to day life' when referring to people in general), and sentence structure. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some errors in punctuation and capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and pronoun consistency. Additionally, try to incorporate more complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or conditional sentences, while ensuring they are grammatically accurate.
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