Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The rapid increase in online shopping will some day lead to shot down of shops in towns and cities. In my opinion, I disagree with the shotting down of shops because of rise in online shopping.
The primary reason is fake or low quality products. Some of the goods sold through company's website are less than what the buyer could imagine. Due to that some consumer prefer to buy those product from walk in shop so that they are can feel the product before making payment. As a result, physical shops could not be closed. For example, many countries advocate for walk in stores to promote trust among customer and the seller.
Another important reason is many individuals visit physical stores for fun. This is because they see it as time to leave the house, to also take a walk around the compound. So with that offline store would likely not going to close down completely. Offline shores helps many people to meet new faces and having a good with together. For instance, weekends are mainly for shopping, restocking the household and it is usually done by many families together, promoting quality time for bonding. It is encouraged to do that always with loved ones from time to time.
In conclusion, I believe that offline shops are more beneficial than online stores because people have fun while shopping with families and use the opportunity to purchase more quality goods.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The essay addresses the prompt by taking a clear position against the total closure of physical shops. However, the response is under the 250-word minimum, which limits the depth of the arguments. While the ideas regarding product quality and social interaction are relevant, they are somewhat under-developed. The conclusion is brief and does not fully synthesize the points made. To improve, you should expand on your examples and ensure that your arguments are fully explored to meet the length requirement and provide a more comprehensive response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use basic cohesive devices like 'The primary reason is' and 'Another important reason is' to transition between ideas. However, the flow is sometimes hindered by repetitive phrasing and awkward sentence structures. The use of referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'with that offline store would likely not going to close'. Improving your use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will help you achieve a higher band score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'shot down of shops' instead of 'closure of shops' and 'walk in shop' instead of 'brick-and-mortar store'. You also use 'good with together' which is not a standard collocation. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to commerce and retail, and pay closer attention to word forms and collocations to ensure your writing sounds more natural and professional.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'they are can feel the product', 'offline shores helps', and 'would likely not going to close'. These errors in subject-verb agreement and verb tense usage are noticeable throughout the text. While your meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents a higher score. Focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and practicing more complex sentence structures to improve your control.
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