Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Today in the world of technology it’s very easy to get everything online . Some people debate that it can lead to the closure of shops to which I agree to some extent but pros and cons go side by side .
To begin with cons of online shopping is it’s more expensive than by going to shop in stores also going to store is more fun a person can walk and have fun with friends or family while shopping but nowadays people likes to stay home and shop through online websites which is leading to closure of stores because a store have to pay the rent employees and the warehouses from which they buy but because of people like to shop from home from website owners are not able to pay their bills which is a main cause of closure of stores . In commence my uncle used to own a cloth shop in a mall which was earning good money for him but now he had to let go his shop because he was not making any good money from the shop .
Along with that If we look at the other hand online shopping is a benediction for busy and disabled people . People who can’t go to stores can order the stuff online and can get the things whatever they want at home . For example with Amazon prime you can get the things you want in hours which is not less than a blessing .
In the nutshell , no matter online shopping have the benefits but directly or indirectly it’s leading to shut the shops down .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the impact of online shopping on physical stores. You have a clear position, agreeing to some extent, and provide relevant examples, such as your uncle's shop and the convenience of Amazon Prime. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. The explanation of why stores are closing is a bit repetitive, and the argument could be strengthened by exploring other factors, such as the changing nature of high streets or the rise of 'experience-based' retail. To reach a higher band, ensure that your arguments are fully extended with more nuanced analysis rather than relying on simple observations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Along with that', and 'In the nutshell'. However, the transitions between sentences are sometimes mechanical, and the flow is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing, such as 'In commence' (which is incorrect usage). Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear; for example, the connection between the uncle's shop and the broader argument about online shopping could be more explicitly linked. Improving the variety and precision of your linking words will help create a more natural flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your meaning, but there are several instances of imprecise word choice and non-standard collocations. For example, 'benediction' is an unusual choice for this context; 'boon' or 'advantage' would be more appropriate. You also use 'stuff' and 'things', which are too informal for an IELTS essay. There are also errors in word formation, such as 'In commence' instead of 'To begin with' or 'For instance'. To improve, focus on using more academic vocabulary and ensuring that your word choices are appropriate for a formal essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people likes to stay home'), missing articles, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'no matter online shopping have the benefits'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spaces before commas. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your score.
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