Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this contemporary era, the increasing trend of purchase stuff online can lead to closing of cities and towns shops. The logic on which my stance based can be discussed below.
The initial factor coming to my mind to substantiate my view point that while buying stuff online we can refund or exchange. To be more specific, based on experience i bought suit from on line site amazon and there was policy of return of 30 days if u don't like stuff you can return and firstly i purchase it was good in pictures while in real it was not that good yet i have option to return and use it while purchasing in town these system doesn't work.
Another crucial base deserve some words, some things can't change people preferences to buy things from local shops or cities. Furthermore, if like something online and it is out of stock we can't buy at that time but in cities shop we have to just show picture of stuff online vendors site they will arrange that in same day and it will be less price as of shown in online. For instance, the result of survey conducted by reader digest the renowned magazine declared that around four million people bought things from local and one million buy stuff online.
Above all, After persuading and considering all the aspects and i would like recapitulate that people never stop buying stuff from local vendors and i totally disagree to this notion of buying stuff online.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position against the idea that all shops will close. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments provided, such as the ability to return items or the preference for local shops, are somewhat superficial and lack depth. The example regarding 'Reader's Digest' is vague and does not effectively support the argument. The response would benefit from more detailed explanations of why physical stores offer unique value, such as the sensory experience of shopping or the immediate availability of goods, to better persuade the reader and fully develop the response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'The initial factor coming to my mind' and 'Another crucial base deserve some words'. These phrases feel unnatural and do not always link ideas smoothly. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition between online stock issues and local shop benefits is abrupt. Improved use of linking words like 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'conversely' would enhance the flow of the argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on informal phrasing such as 'purchase stuff' and 'buying stuff'. There are several instances of awkward word choice, such as 'substantiate my view point' and 'recapitulate that people never stop'. The student attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'vendors' and 'policy of return', but the overall range is limited. To reach a higher band, the student needs to use more precise, academic vocabulary and demonstrate a better grasp of collocations and formal register suitable for an essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The logic on which my stance based'), article usage ('i bought suit'), and sentence structure ('if like something online and it is out of stock we can't buy at that time'). The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple or poorly constructed complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and capitalization errors. A greater focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for grammatical accuracy is essential for improvement.
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