Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Online shopping is increasing day by day as a result all small shops and cities will close soon. Howerver i agree with this notion because internet shopping is convenient and time saving, also it give numerous discounts which we cannot get while shopping from shops.
Digital purchasing plays an important role in everyone's life due to everyone's hectic schedule. Firstly, no one has that much time to go to distinct shops for buying different things and online shopping is a god's gift for them because it saves their alot of time to buy things just with a one click while sitting on their sofas at home or anywhere are they. for instance, if their is four persons living in a family then all of them are working for getting luxorios life for themself and prefer to do online shopping instead of wasting time on window shopping.
Secondly, online shopping bestows number of discounts on different websites which is impossible while shopping from shops as well as cities, consequently, digital shopping is more preferred by everyone than local shops due to in spending less money and getting same stuff.
Last but not least, there are immense of new arrivals are available on websites which we can buy on a one click according to our choice, however while visiting shops we miss that opportunities to get that particular fashionable trends. To epitomize, the famous SVP (sports Value Plus) where many new trends shows while online shopping at their site but the same clothes doesnot there when visiting that store, so undoubtedly, online purchasing is much better than window shopping.
To conclude, From my point of view, online shopping has many advantages otweighted disvantages of local shops which would be the reason to closing of shops in the cities and towns soon.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of the idea that online shopping will lead to the closure of physical stores. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide reasons such as convenience and discounts, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the point about 'hectic schedules' is mentioned but not fully explored in relation to the broader impact on urban infrastructure. To improve, ensure that each paragraph introduces a distinct, well-supported point rather than restating the same benefits of online shopping. The conclusion is clear, but the overall development remains at a basic level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'To conclude'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'that opportunities' or 'that particular fashionable trends'). The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices and ensure that the logical progression within paragraphs is smoother, avoiding repetitive sentence structures.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher score. You rely on simple terms like 'good's gift' and 'luxorios life' (spelling error). There are also instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'immense of new arrivals' and 'the reason to closing of shops'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range is limited, and there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic or topic-specific collocations would significantly improve your performance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('there is four persons'), incorrect article usage, and punctuation errors (e.g., missing commas, run-on sentences). The sentence 'if their is four persons living in a family then all of them are working for getting luxorios life for themself' contains multiple errors in grammar and spelling. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common errors before finalizing your work.
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