Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the groth of social shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
this eassy disscuss the main reason online shopping close whole day. i'm write this eassy to ensure that one day closing due to holiday all the country every client know the day all cities and country close moreover light is switch off all the cities shop is close customer not come in markets due to warmly weather and some electrical issue face in many cities i dont agree because light is main part of the market and many shops consumption light. there are many issue slove when light come in all cities.
in conclusion i agree one day growth of online shopping to my city had light issue or like rainig all the day then people useing online app to shopping. people like to do online shopping but they fear some faces problem. size issue in cloths and shoes online shopping is easy but the parcel is come to client they order different colour and size not match. people allow to open parcel. they easily check the order was same or change.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to address the prompt effectively. The essay is significantly under the 250-word minimum, which severely limits the development of ideas. The content is largely incoherent, focusing on 'electrical issues' and 'weather' rather than the core debate regarding the future of physical retail versus online shopping. The position is unclear and inconsistent, as the writer oscillates between agreeing and disagreeing without providing logical arguments. Due to the lack of development and failure to meet the length requirement, the response does not adequately address the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. There is no clear introduction, body, or conclusion. Paragraphing is absent, and the flow of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. Cohesive devices are almost entirely missing, and the few attempts at linking ideas (e.g., 'moreover', 'in conclusion') are used incorrectly or in contexts that do not make sense. The progression of ideas is non-existent, as the text jumps between unrelated topics like electricity and online shopping.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'groth', 'eassy', 'disscuss', 'slove', 'people useing') that impede communication. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the word choice is often inappropriate for an academic or formal context. The writer struggles to use basic terminology related to the topic, such as 'retail', 'e-commerce', or 'consumer behavior', relying instead on simplistic and inaccurate phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is highly inaccurate, with frequent errors in sentence structure, verb tense, and subject-verb agreement. Almost every sentence contains significant errors, such as 'i'm write this eassy' and 'the parcel is come to client'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the basic sentences are often fragmented or run-on. Punctuation is largely ignored, which further complicates the meaning. These persistent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and prevent the clear communication of ideas.
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