Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Nowadays there are explansion of digital shoppings around the world as a result there are chances of all the shops and stores will be shut down permentally. I am agree on this notion, in this essay I will provide supporting reasons for this trend.
Many individuals adapting new technologies therefore, even a small start-up providing online deliveries through their website. The owner do not need any physical space for this they can operate business in their home. Moreover, customer have a freedom of purchasing at anytime and no matter where they are. Online shopping opens 24/7, on public holidays and during weekends. For example, Amazon, Flipcart, etc.
Major reason is the Inflation because of the increasing number of the living population everthing become so expensive. To rent a small property in the city centre area will be costs more than net revenue. There is no doubt about foot falls, it is going to be a very busy when established on city centre but paying such high rent does not make any sense to do a business. Solution for this is, buy a godown or warehouse in the out skirt of the city area becuase property prices are low on those areas and build online website and run your business through providing online service.
To conclude, running a business is very tough but people need to focused on the customer's behaviour what are they doing? If they are prefered online services rather than offline stores it is the best to do a business. Due to online services owners do not have to pay such a high rent and from customers perspective they can shop anytime and anywhere.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The essay addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide reasons such as high rent and the convenience of online shopping, the arguments lack depth and specific, well-explained examples. For instance, mentioning Amazon is a good start, but you do not explain how it specifically contributes to the closure of physical stores. To improve, ensure that each paragraph fully explores the 'why' and 'how' behind your claims. The conclusion is a bit repetitive and does not fully synthesize the arguments presented. Focus on providing more detailed analysis to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'To conclude', which help the flow. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Major reason is the Inflation because of the increasing number of the living population'. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, and the relationship between sentences could be strengthened by using a wider variety of linking words. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs could be more cohesive to ensure a smoother reading experience.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'explansion of digital shoppings', 'permentally', and 'godown'. While the meaning is generally clear, these errors indicate a limited control over more sophisticated vocabulary. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring correct spelling. Try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to economics and retail to demonstrate a wider range of lexical resources.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('customer have a freedom', 'owner do not need'), article usage, and sentence fragments. For example, 'Many individuals adapting new technologies therefore, even a small start-up...' is grammatically incomplete. While you attempt complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and tense consistency. Reducing the frequency of these errors will significantly improve your score.
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