Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It has been observed that, due to cybershopping one day all the shops will close. I firmly disagee with the given statement. My inclination is elaborated in esuing paragraph and relevant example.

The formost argument to justify my stand is that people like to try the clothe first and then buy. Majority of people like to do offline shopping as they can try them how it's gonna be look on them. Another advatage is that peson can try varity of cloths and match them with diffrent footwear and accesiories and compare them. For intance, I can try varitoy of tops on same pants and check them which one will suit me. Beside this, it is also true that sometimes clothes pattern and clolour is good but after actual wearing that you can find is it really suits you or not?

Furthermore, the other reason to prove my point is in winter time people mostly like to go to mall with their friends or parter for shopping. It is nice hangout spot for them as in winter people can not do such activities. Moreover, you can also get the review from staff member and ask them for better options.

On the contray, virtual shopping is time saving. It is very easy, also individual find more availble option in that. Not only it can save your time but some times it has better deals than offline shopping.

To conclude the discussion, it can be said that despite the fact of cheaper and time saving online shopping, my reasons that ability to see, touch and try product are logically acceptable.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. The arguments regarding the physical experience of shopping and the social aspect of malls are relevant. However, the development is somewhat limited; the ideas are presented but not fully extended with sophisticated reasoning. For instance, the point about winter shopping is a bit narrow. The counter-argument is acknowledged, but the rebuttal is brief. To reach a higher band, you should aim to provide more depth in your explanations and ensure that your examples are more illustrative rather than just personal anecdotes. Overall, the task is addressed, but the development of ideas remains at a basic level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'On the contrary', and 'To conclude', which help the flow. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'My inclination is elaborated in esuing paragraph'. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, and the internal structure of the paragraphs could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect sentences more fluidly. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the overall cohesion could be more natural and less repetitive.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it is quite limited and repetitive. You use basic terms like 'good', 'nice', and 'easy' frequently. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'disagee', 'esuing', 'formost', 'clothe', 'advatage', 'peson', 'varity', 'diffrent', 'accesiories', 'varitoy', 'clolour', and 'contray'. These errors are frequent and occasionally distract the reader. To improve, you need to expand your range of vocabulary to include more precise and academic terms and pay closer attention to spelling. You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, but the lack of precision and the high frequency of spelling mistakes limit your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'try the clothe first', 'how it's gonna be look on them', 'individual find more availble option', and 'despite the fact of cheaper and time saving online shopping'. These errors, particularly with articles, verb forms, and sentence construction, are noticeable. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the text from reaching a higher band. You should focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed accurately.

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