Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Day by day, today world is become more developed due to technology advance. This processing flow become the reasoning of close many small shops in towns also cities and rural areas. I support with this view point have many reasons. I discus in further paragraph.
To being with, in recent era youth prefer to do online shopping rather than face to face. There are many reasons behind. The main influence is that preserve time and money. For example, when we buy clothes from online we have not require to attend shopping centres or small shops. which save time and we get some discount by using app like TEMU, SHEIN, AMAZONE etc. furthermore, the another factor is that online platform give variety of choices like available many sizes, different colour as well as designs. these all choices are not available on shops, market and centres.
In addition, this platform provide many facilities such as refuse and refund. to explicate we make order for one bridal style grown. After we receive order we do not satisfaction with this grown. if we have not time to wait for another grown hence we can refuse the order and cancelled it. while, we have enough time so we can refan and make another order easily which save our time . this type of facility we have not receive by shopping mall and shops.
In conclusion, increasing the technology advance become the reason of closing shops and centres in town. I personally believe that today people want to save both time and money.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear stance agreeing with the statement that online shopping will lead to physical shops closing. The main ideas regarding time-saving, cost-efficiency, and product variety are introduced and supported with examples such as TEMU, SHEIN, and Amazon. However, the development is somewhat limited and repetitive, and certain parts lack depth. For instance, the explanation regarding the return process is somewhat convoluted and difficult to follow. Overall, the ideas satisfy the prompt, but the limited depth and repetitive nature of the arguments restrict the score to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay has a basic organizational structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, progression is frequently hindered by awkward transitions, such as 'To being with' and 'to explicate we make order for one bridal style grown.' Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is often faulty or mechanical. Referencing pronouns (e.g., 'this platform', 'these all choices') are occasionally unclear or confusing, and cohesive devices are inadequate or overused. This places the response firmly in the Band 5.0 range for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with frequent lexical errors that impede smooth reading (e.g., 'close many small shops' instead of 'closing many small shops', 'preserve time' instead of 'save time', 'bridal style grown' instead of 'bridal style gown', 'refan' instead of 'refund'). While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'technology advance' and 'cost-efficient concepts', the inaccurate word choices and frequent spelling mistakes mean the lexical range is minimally adequate, justifying a Band 5.0 score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are almost invariably faulty, featuring frequent errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and clause structure (e.g., 'today world is become', 'when we buy clothes from online we have not require', 'if we have not time to wait... hence we can refuse'). Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic throughout the text. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher score, aligning with Band 4.0.
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