Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Today's technology is moderate technology. Everyone is busy in their own life.We are living in that kind of century thair most of them have smart phones, laptops, computer and many more. Even children also use to work with phones and laptop or computer.They also have thair private too.And in thishard and fast life no one like to go out sides to by things.
Many companies are providing online shopping. Whatever you want you can directly check thair websites and you can buy what you want.Even what you buy you no need go go anywhere to collect or pick thare. They providing door to door facilities as well.
Food items, clothing items, house hold things, madicine, groceries, educational thing etc, many thing you want you can buy them too.
Not only small items even big electronics items , vehicles, properties also you can buy online too.
many artists sell their products, many home made thing you can by online too,even many housewives doing their online business too.
some of supermarket also provide online shopping facilities too.you no need to go out side and buy something that what you want. Not ony day time some of them provide 24 by 7 days facilities.
Today many people are thinking if. you get same thing at your door step why should worries to go outside and buy.In this century modern people, morden life styles and morden technology. Online shopping is like game thats people are enjoying much.
As my opinion I think in future only online shopping is the option for new generation,thats why online shopping will effect stores and mall in town.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The candidate addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position that online shopping will eventually replace physical stores in towns and cities. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. The response lists many types of items available online, such as 'food items, clothing items, house hold things, madicine', rather than fully exploring the socio-economic or practical reasons why physical shops might or might not close entirely. The perspective is present and understandable, but the supporting arguments tend to over-generalise without deep elaboration. This falls within the parameters of Band 5, where the task is addressed, but ideas remain underdeveloped and somewhat limited.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks proper paragraphing, consisting instead of a series of very short, disjointed sentences and broken lines that fail to form cohesive paragraphs. Transitions between ideas are abrupt, and cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'too' at the end of multiple clauses (e.g., 'you can buy online too', 'home made thing you can by online too'). There is no clear overall progression of argument from introduction to conclusion; instead, the text reads as a random collection of observations. This level of organisation and cohesion aligns with Band 4 descriptors, as information and ideas are not arranged coherently.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and frequently repetitive, with words like 'online shopping', 'buy', and 'things' appearing constantly. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'thair' instead of 'their', 'madicine' instead of 'medicine', 'educatinal thing', and 'morden' instead of 'modern'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying a basic message, but the frequent lexical errors and lack of sophisticated phrasing prevent the response from achieving a higher score. This matches the Band 5 descriptor where vocabulary is limited and noticeable errors occur.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is severely restricted, consisting mainly of simple sentences and repetitive structures like 'You can buy...' and 'There are...'. Complex sentence forms are rare and, when attempted, are generally faulty, such as in 'Today many people are thinking if. you get same thing at your door step why should worries to go outside and buy.' Punctuation and capitalization are frequently neglected, and there are pervasive errors in subject-verb agreement and word forms (e.g., 'no need go go anywhere', 'some of supermarket also provide'). These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and reflect the Band 4 level.
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