Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In recent years ,Technolagy is developingday by day that leads into different feature such as online shopping. It has attracted considerable attention and generated widespread debate. While increasing the online shoppingcan leads to the towns shops but some extent, I firmly believe that,I cannot replace the offline shopping. I demonstrates the both perpectives in upcoming paragrapghs.
The most prominent reason is to prefer online shopping is convinience . Most of the people serving full time job as they dont have the time to visit the shops in person, they chose to buy things online as followingtge reviews of the product. In practical terms , they get discount and offers which give them rewards and they save their money . For example,n this modern era , with the help of technology , we can gothroughfrom any website and search for the specific thing rather than wasting time to look for the product on street shops.
On the flip side, either most the people want to do shopping online but It cannot shut down the market and the local shops , the significant reason is that , no compromise with the quality . if the people are spending money on the product , they want quality in it as they expore teh product , check the quality and then buy it . moreover , another point is that , some people didnt trust the online shopping becauseof the scams and frauds are increasing day by day .they dont like much to use their personal and private information on the websites as a result they comes for offline shopping.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that whether Most of the society take more preference over mobile shopping but there is no replacement of towns and malls as per for their quality , affordable and options .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The candidate addresses the task by presenting a clear position that online shopping will not completely replace physical stores, despite acknowledging its growth and convenience. Ideas are presented regarding convenience, cost savings, quality checks, and trust issues. However, some arguments are underdeveloped or expressed with a lack of clarity, such as the sentence 'While increasing the online shopping can leads to the towns shops but some extent.' Although all parts of the prompt are addressed, the support remains somewhat limited and repetitive. This aligns well with the Band 6 descriptor, where relevant ideas are presented, but some are unclear or under-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, showing an overall structure. However, paragraphing and logical progression are frequently hindered by mechanical or faulty cohesion. Phrases like 'On the flip side, either most the people want to do shopping online but It cannot shut down...' disrupt the flow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and cohesive devices are often awkward or inaccurate. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak. These features place the response firmly in the Band 5 category, where there is some organization, but cohesive devices are inadequate, inaccurate, or overused.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, touching on concepts like 'convenience', 'discounts and offers', 'scams and frauds', and 'quality'. However, there are numerous word choice and spelling errors, such as 'Technolagy', 'convinience', 'expore', and 'didnt trust'. Less common lexical items are attempted but lack precision or natural collocation, as seen in 'take more preference over'. While communication is maintained despite the errors, the noticeable inaccuracies and limited precision prevent the score from reaching a Band 6, making Band 5 a more accurate description of the lexical control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but attempts at complex structures are frequently marred by serious grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement errors ('It demonstrates the both perpectives', 'as a result they comes'), incorrect preposition use ('go through from any website'), and run-on sentences with poor punctuation. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and impede fluent comprehension in places. Therefore, the grammatical performance reflects the Band 5 descriptor, characterized by a limited range of structures and frequent errors.
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