Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In today's world, due to rapid advancement in technology, online shopping has become trend among people around the world. Some people believe that this growth will eventually force every shop in towns and cities to shut down. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this view because some products need personal attention.

To begin with, many products and services need a physical presence. Customers like to buy things after checking products' food details, expiratory dates, material of clothes, and quality. For example, high quality clothes or foods need physical examination, when customers go to buy them. Moreover, daily essentials, such as milk, fresh food and medicine are often needed immediately, which in online shopping is not possible.

Apart from that, many people do not like to do online shopping. They prefer physical shopping, like going in stores or supermarkets. Elderly people, those without internet or bank cards, and those who disrupt online shopping because they are cheated or fraud by online companies prefer store shopping. For example, apps, such as Meesho, Myntra, Blinkit and Filpkart sometimes do not put the original product in delivery in their customer's order instead they put other items, so often people get fraud by online shopping.

On the other hand, online shopping offers several advances to their customers, such as seasonal discounts and sales. Online shopping is more affordable, cheaper and convenient for many people. Online shopping has more platforms to buy products and customers can compare different prices and details in the internet before making a purchase. However, these benefit are limited to some apps and websites.

All in all, although online shopping offers benefits such as price comparisons and big discounts, I firmly believe that physical shops will exist, as they provide experiences and services that the internet can not replace.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

Your position is clear from the introduction to the conclusion: you disagree that online shopping will eliminate physical shops. You address both sides by explaining the value of in-person inspection and immediate access to essentials, then acknowledging online discounts and price comparisons. The examples of clothing, food, medicine, and delivery problems help support your reasons. This is a well-focused response with ideas extended and supported. To strengthen it further, develop the point about people who avoid online shopping: the claim that some customers are cheated is relevant, but explaining how this affects trust or why shops offer a dependable alternative would make the reasoning more complete. Some claims, such as that certain products “need physical examination,” could also be qualified rather than presented broadly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two paragraphs supporting physical shops, a paragraph acknowledging online shopping’s advantages, and a concluding restatement. Linking phrases such as “To begin with,” “Apart from that,” and “On the other hand” make the progression easy to follow. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent arrangement and shows some features of stronger progression. However, cohesion is occasionally mechanical, and the second supporting paragraph contains several ideas—preferences, access to technology, and fraud—without clearly separating or developing their relationships. The repeated phrase “online shopping” also makes connections less flexible. Use more precise referencing and vary transitions, while ensuring each paragraph develops one main reason in a clear sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate your main points, including “physical presence,” “seasonal discounts,” “compare different prices,” and “immediately.” There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “expiratory dates” and “physical examination,” but some choices are inaccurate or unnatural and occasionally make the meaning less clear. Examples include “has become trend,” “get fraud,” “put the original product in delivery,” and “these benefit.” Spelling and word-form slips such as “Filpkart” and “expiratory” also affect precision. The range is adequate for the task, but repeated basic wording limits flexibility. Build accuracy by learning common collocations for shopping, delivery, product quality, and consumer trust, then check word forms and spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including a reason clause in “I completely disagree … because some products need personal attention” and a relative clause in “which in online shopping is not possible.” Most sentences remain understandable, and errors rarely prevent the reader from following your argument. Some grammatical problems persist, however: “has become trend” needs an article, “Customers like to buy things after checking products’…” has an unclear possessive construction, and “these benefit are” has a number-agreement error. The sentence beginning “Elderly people…” is also difficult to parse because its structure does not clearly connect the groups of people with their preference. Review articles, agreement, and sentence construction, and punctuate longer examples so their relationships are clear.

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