Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

home delivery

compare price

best deal

refund and return policy

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It is often argued that the growth of e-commerce will one day lead to all offline shops in town and cities closing. I completely agree with this view because e-commerec is more convinent and it's easy to compare product prices accross the world.

The primary reason why I agree with this view is that e-commerec is more convinent because if the home delivery. This is because

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

Your opening establishes a clear position: “I completely agree,” and gives two relevant reasons—convenience through home delivery and the ability to compare prices internationally. However, the response does not develop either reason: the explanation stops at “This is because,” and there are no supporting examples or discussion of why physical shops would all close. The task is therefore addressed only minimally, despite the relevant starting ideas. The response also falls substantially short of the required 250 words, leaving the argument incomplete. To improve, explain each reason with a specific example, consider whether any types of shops might remain, and write a complete conclusion that reinforces your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0

The response has a recognisable beginning: the first paragraph introduces the topic, states your opinion, and previews two reasons. The next paragraph begins to develop the first reason, so there is an attempt at paragraphing and progression. However, the progression breaks down because the response ends mid-explanation at “This is because,” and the initial notes (“home delivery,” “compare price,” “best deal,” “refund and return policy”) are not integrated into the essay. The link between the two reasons is also not developed. Build a clear sequence of introduction, separate body paragraphs, and conclusion; use linking phrases to show how each example supports your position, and ensure each paragraph is complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “e-commerce,” “home delivery,” “compare product prices,” and “refund and return policy.” These choices make the subject clear, and “growth of e-commerce” is an appropriate way to introduce the issue. However, the range is limited in this short response, and several spelling errors affect accuracy: “e-commerec,” “convinent,” and “accross.” The notes also include incomplete or imprecise phrases such as “compare price” and “best deal.” Aim to use accurate spelling and more precise expressions, such as “compare prices” and “find the most competitive offer.” Developing the essay would also give you opportunities to use a broader range of vocabulary for convenience, consumer choice, and the future of physical retail.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both a complex opening sentence and a reason clause, as in “I completely agree with this view because…,” showing some ability to connect ideas. The main grammatical weakness is the unfinished construction “This is because,” which leaves the sentence incomplete. In “because if the home delivery,” the clause is also incorrectly formed and does not express a complete idea. The response contains too little sustained writing to demonstrate a wider range of structures or consistent control. Practise completing clauses after connectors such as “because” and “if,” and check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb. For example, you could write: “Online shopping is convenient because retailers deliver purchases directly to customers’ homes.”

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