Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Firstly ii think there two big things for people in the world that they can buy anything by online but some people does not belive on online shopping they think that online shopping is a scam so they prefer to go on shops to watch product and touch the prouduct before purchase but other side people think its just waste of time to shopping froms cites or shopping and they prefe that online is better to chose everything about product they can check reviewa about product and make sure that product is good but in now days the shop owners also sale their product online to make picture of any item and place a price on picture and upload on social media
in this all things i observate that shops are close beacuse of online shopping in future people were to busy in there work so they dont come to shops over new genration mostly does not outside for food they can order online and the resturant deleverd food after in minutes
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
You address the topic by discussing why some customers still prefer physical shops and why others choose online shopping, and you suggest that shops may close as people become busier. However, your position is not stated clearly: the opening describes both sides, while the conclusion-like final sentence says shops will close without explaining whether you agree or disagree. The reasons are also only briefly mentioned, such as customers wanting to touch products and younger people ordering food, with little explanation or specific supporting example. The response is 172 words, below the required 250, so it cannot develop the argument sufficiently. State your view directly, then explain and support two or three reasons in a complete essay.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
There is a basic attempt to organise the response: you first contrast customers who distrust online shopping with those who value its convenience, then move to the possible future effect on shops. Linking expressions such as “but” and “in this” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the response is one long paragraph, and the progression is difficult to follow because several points are joined together without clear sentence boundaries. The shift from online retail to restaurant delivery also feels abrupt. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons, and conclusion, and make each paragraph focus on one main idea. Clearer transitions would help readers see how each example supports your view.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the general subject, including “online shopping,” “product,” “review,” “shop owners,” and “social media.” There are also attempts to express relevant distinctions, such as customers wanting to “touch the product” before buying and others seeing shopping as a “waste of time.” However, the vocabulary is repetitive and several spelling or word-choice errors make parts harder to understand, including “belive,” “prouduct,” “reviewa,” and “observate.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “go on shops” and “make picture of any item.” Build a more accurate range of shopping-related expressions and check spelling and collocations. For example, use “visit physical stores” and “upload product photos.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt to connect ideas using clauses and contrast, for example, “some people … but other side people think,” so the response is not limited entirely to short, simple statements. However, complex sentences are often difficult to follow because of frequent errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, and punctuation. Examples include “there two big things,” “some people does not,” and “people were to busy”; the long opening sentence also runs several ideas together without full stops. These errors sometimes obscure the relationships between points. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check tense and agreement. Breaking long sentences into shorter ones will make your meaning more reliable while you develop more varied structures.
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