Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

• correct the information in the article
• explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
• suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I recently came across an article in your magazine about my town while I was travelling to Malaysia.

Firstly I would like to express my gratitude to you that you chose to write an article about our small town which is located hidden in the mountains. There is some information that is not factually correct and I would like to present you with some clarity on this topic. It stated in the article that women are not allowed to leave homes for work without a male chaperone. This information is false, women have complete freedom in our town and males only accompany their females to protect them from wild-life or harsh weather conditions.

As I saw your magazine is quite popular among travellers, I believe it is important that correct information is given so there is no negative impact created about our town. Recent years have seen boost in tourism in our area and one misinformation could stop that progress.

Since I know recall of the magazine at such a huge scale would not be possible so I would like to request you rewrite the article by replacing the incorrect information with the correct one.

Kind Regards,

MK

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

You address all three requirements clearly: you identify the false claim about women needing a male chaperone, explain that inaccurate reporting could harm the town’s reputation and tourism, and request that the article be rewritten. The letter also maintains a suitable, respectful purpose and gives a clear correction: women have freedom to work, while male relatives may accompany them for protection. The explanation of the potential effect on tourism is relevant, though “one misinformation could stop that progress” is quite general and would be stronger with a more specific consequence. The proposed remedy is clear, but you could make it more complete by asking the magazine to publish a correction or apology as well as revise the article.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response follows a logical sequence: it introduces the article, corrects its claim, explains why accuracy matters, and ends with a request. Paragraphing helps distinguish these purposes, and signposting such as “Firstly” and “Since” makes the progression easy to follow. The ideas are generally connected, although some transitions feel formulaic, and the final paragraph’s opening clause is difficult to follow because it combines the impracticality of recalling the magazine with the request to rewrite the article. The reference to “one misinformation” also interrupts the flow. For stronger cohesion, use clearer links between the town’s tourism growth and the specific harm inaccurate information could cause.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range for the letter, including topic-appropriate expressions such as “factually correct,” “male chaperone,” “negative impact,” and “tourism.” These choices communicate the issue clearly, and “harsh weather conditions” adds useful detail. Some collocations and word forms are less natural, however: “present you with some clarity” and “one misinformation” do not sound idiomatic, while “recall of the magazine” is an imprecise way to describe withdrawing or correcting an article. “Wild-life” is also normally written as one word, “wildlife.” Aim for more precise, natural combinations, especially when describing the correction and its consequences; this would make the vocabulary more flexible and controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including the relative clause “which is located hidden in the mountains” and the conditional idea “so there is no negative impact created.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors and awkward constructions limit accuracy. In “I would like to express my gratitude to you that you chose,” the clause pattern is faulty; use “gratitude that you chose” or “thank you for choosing.” The sentence beginning “Since I know recall…” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “women have complete freedom … and males only accompany” joins two independent clauses with only a comma. Review clause construction, sentence boundaries, and articles, as in “a boost in tourism.” More consistently accurate complex sentences would strengthen control.

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