Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

• correct the information in the article
• explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
• suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction for an article about the town of smiths falls that was publised in your travel magazine. Some information in the article that you have mentioned are incorrect.

You have mentioned that tourist in our town are flourished in the month of September, whereas our township ususally received highest number of visitors in the month of May. Furthermore, public authories start their seasonal maintenance in April to make sure that tourist would receive best services and feel welcome. Our town is popular attraction for tourist. Therefore, it becomes important to correct them. This information is very critical and it would be very frustrating to visitors if they come here in September after reading your article.

I kindly request you to publish the article with corrections. So audience would be informed in proper manners and confusions can be avoided. Please feel free to ask us in case you have any questions.

Thanks

Kind regards,

vaibhav

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three requirements: it identifies the incorrect claim about September, gives May as the month with the most visitors, explains that inaccurate timing could frustrate visitors, and asks the magazine to publish a corrected article. The seasonal maintenance detail adds relevant support. The purpose and requested action are clear, and the response shows some development beyond simply listing the errors. However, the importance of accurate information is explained mainly through the possible inconvenience to visitors; the effect on the town and the magazine’s credibility could be developed further. The correction could also be stated more precisely, for example by clearly saying that visitor numbers peak in May, rather than using the unclear phrase “tourist in our town are flourished.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: it opens by identifying the article, gives the correction and its consequences in the next paragraph, then makes a request. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “Therefore” help show relationships between ideas, and the closing is appropriate for a formal letter. Some cohesion is less controlled, however. “Therefore, it becomes important to correct them” has an unclear reference, since “them” could refer to the visitors or the pieces of information. The transition from the town’s popularity to the need for correction is also somewhat abrupt. The final request would connect more smoothly if it specified that the magazine should correct the September claim and publish the revised information, rather than referring generally to “the article with corrections.”

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

There is adequate vocabulary for the purpose, including “dissatisfaction,” “seasonal maintenance,” “visitors,” and “publish,” and the reader can understand the main message. The response also attempts more formal expressions, but several choices or forms are inaccurate or unnatural: “flourished” does not describe visitor numbers in this sentence, “public authories” is misspelled, and “in proper manners” is not an idiomatic phrase. “Tourist” is also repeated where “visitors” or “tourists” would provide more natural variation. These issues do not prevent understanding, but they limit precision and naturalness. Aim for accurate collocations such as “visitor numbers peak,” “local authorities,” and “in a clear and accurate manner,” and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The letter uses a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including a subordinate clause in “if they come here in September after reading your article” and a purpose clause with “to make sure.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors occur. For example, “Some information … are incorrect” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “our township usually received” uses an unsuitable tense for a general fact. In “tourist … are flourished,” the passive construction is not grammatically appropriate; a direct form such as “visitor numbers are highest” would work. The sentence beginning “So audience would be informed” also needs a clearer grammatical connection to the request. More consistent agreement, tense, articles, and sentence linking would improve accuracy.

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