Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

• correct the information in the article
• explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
• suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I recently read your article in the magazine about my town. I am writing this letter to inform you that some of the information about my town is incorrected.Firstly, you talk about the litter sepread by youngsters and neither facility of hospital and good education system. This is totally wrong because in my hometown, we do have one high school and a hospital in which people can treat themselves at a free cost and also on every Sunday group of people from my town, clean their place and this repeated every week. i am giving the correct information to you because I don't want that from your magazine People learn wrong about my hometown which cause drawback. Additionally in my hometown, we have a very beautiful park, which has some traditional sculpture because of that many tourist came there to visit and have a look, and I don't want that because of wrong information we decrease the number of tourism in our hometown. however, i request you in a upcoming magazine please add the correct information about my hometown so people have more look visit to my hometown. I shall be very grateful to you.

Your faithfully,

Rhea

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you correct the claims about litter, healthcare and education, explain that inaccurate reporting could mislead readers and reduce tourism, and ask the magazine to publish corrected information. The examples of a weekly community clean-up, a free hospital and a park with traditional sculptures make the correction relevant. This fits the task well, although some details are not fully clear: “neither facility of hospital and good education system” is difficult to interpret, and the school is mentioned without explaining what the article said about education. Develop the correction point more precisely by stating each inaccurate claim and its accurate replacement. A more formal salutation and closing would also suit a letter to an editor better.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter follows a generally sensible order: you introduce the problem, give corrections, explain the consequences and make a request. Linking expressions such as “Firstly,” “Additionally” and “however” help signal these stages. However, most of the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the different purposes of the letter are not clearly separated. Some connections are also awkward or unclear, particularly the transition from the hospital and school to the weekly clean-up, and the sentence beginning “I am giving the correct information to you because…”. Use separate paragraphs for the correction, its importance and your requested action. Shorter sentences and clearer references would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “hospital,” “education system,” “traditional sculpture” and “tourism.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “free cost” and “drawback,” but several choices or forms are inaccurate and sometimes make the meaning harder to understand. For example, “incorrected” should be “incorrect,” “litter sepread” is unclear, and “have more look visit” does not express the intended idea naturally. Some repetition of “my hometown” and “correct information” also limits flexibility. Choose precise collocations and check spelling and word forms; for instance, say that visitors “come to see” the park’s sculptures and that misinformation could “damage the town’s reputation.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a reason clause with “because” and a relative clause describing the park. However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and errors in sentence boundaries, verb forms, agreement and articles recur. For example, “this repeated every week” needs a verb such as “this is repeated,” while “many tourist came” needs plural agreement and a consistent tense. The long sentence beginning “Firstly” joins several ideas without clear punctuation, and the lowercase “i” and “however” also affect accuracy. Practise separating ideas into complete sentences, then check subject–verb agreement, tense consistency and punctuation. This will make your meaning clearer while preserving your attempts at varied structures.

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