Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

• correct the information in the article
• explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
• suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Madam,

I am writing this letter to complain about your magazine regarding the information that you published.

Actually, one day I was reading your magazine titled "Tourism". I read that you published information about my town - Owensound,is quite peaceful site, eye catching view like- trails, lakes, a small beach and a small zoo, restaurant those are attactracting cause for tourism which i really appreciate. However, I found you mentioned in your magazine to stay in this town is quite costly in manner of booking hotel. Sorry to says that its not properly true , There are few hotels and motels are available at cheap prices that can ordinary tourist can afford, with supper required services.

So, I would suggest you kindly change this statement or information regarding staying expenses -this town is expensive. Undoubtedly, You false information affects our tourist numbers. In addition, a magazine is one of the ways people get information about things, and it really put impact on their knowledge.

I look forward your response.

Yours faithfully,

Kiran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: correcting the information, explaining the importance of accuracy, and suggesting a solution. Your tone is generally appropriate for a letter to an editor. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention that the magazine's misinformation affects tourist numbers, this point could be expanded with a specific example of how it impacts local businesses. Additionally, the structure of your argument is clear, but the expression of your ideas is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'in manner of booking hotel'. Overall, you have fulfilled the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the purpose of the letter to the correction, the explanation, and finally the suggestion. You use basic cohesive devices like 'However', 'So', and 'In addition' to link your ideas. However, the paragraphing is somewhat disjointed, and the flow between sentences is occasionally interrupted by grammatical errors. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'it really put impact on their knowledge', where the antecedent of 'it' is slightly ambiguous. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would help elevate your score in this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'peaceful', 'undoubtedly', and 'appreciate'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'not properly true', 'supper required services', and 'put impact on'. These errors occasionally make the text sound unnatural. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and using more precise vocabulary to convey your meaning. While your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate your message clearly, it lacks the flexibility and precision required for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation throughout the text. Examples include 'one day I was reading your magazine titled "Tourism"' (missing article), 'There are few hotels and motels are available' (redundant verb), and 'I look forward your response' (missing preposition). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement and spacing. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions will significantly improve your accuracy.

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