Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

• correct the information in the article
• explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
• suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

Hope you are doing well.

This email informs you that I want to shed light on my concern, which I noticed in the magazine that is an international magazine that spreads wrong information regarding my town, Brampton. As we have too many parks, libraries, newly built roads, and recreational spots in the area where I have been living since my birth, it shows we have limited opportunity in that area, but that is incorrect information in the article.

I will expect that the magazine should be more authentic, real, and up-to-date with new facilities, which we already have in the area, as spreading wrong information to people makes them not like living here and spending money to build their houses here, which will put an adverse impact on the area.

There is a way in which magazines can easily handle this situation. Firstly, if it publishes a small note with the name of this international magazine in which it highlights the wrong information and corrects the new and real facilities, the situation will be easily handled.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Best regards,

Dilpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all three bullet points of the task. You successfully identify the incorrect information regarding Brampton, explain the importance of accuracy, and suggest a corrective action. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation of why accuracy is important is a bit repetitive and could be more clearly articulated. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though it occasionally slips into a more conversational style. To reach a higher band, ensure that your arguments are fully extended and that the tone remains consistently professional throughout the entire letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly' and 'as', but the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical. The referencing is occasionally unclear; for instance, in the first paragraph, the phrase 'it shows we have limited opportunity' is ambiguous in its connection to the previous clause. Additionally, the transition between the problem and your suggested solution could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus will enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'shed light on', 'authentic', and 'adverse impact'. However, there are some instances of imprecise word choice, such as 'spreads wrong information' (better: 'contains inaccurate information') and 'real facilities' (better: 'actual amenities'). The vocabulary is functional but lacks the sophistication or precision required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more specific collocations related to journalism and urban development, and avoid repeating basic words like 'wrong' or 'area' too frequently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that persist. For example, 'I will expect that the magazine should be' is slightly awkward; 'I expect the magazine to' would be more natural. There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrasing, such as 'since my birth' (better: 'since I was born'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on refining your use of complex sentence structures and checking for subject-verb agreement.

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