Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

• correct the information in the article
• explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
• suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear sir,

I am writing this email in response to a recent article published on one of your globally distributed magazine Travel Time. Last week, an incorrect information was published regarding the opening hours of a well known recreational park which is situated in my city Brampton.

The article mentioned that park is going to reopen on June 3rd which is incorrect. Because of minor repairs, actual opening date of park is now postponed to June 7, four days later than the mentioned date. It is important to correct the information as soon as possible so that people can plan their holidays accordingly without getting disappointed due to early arrival.

I also want you to add the process of getting access to park along with parking charges in the article. Last year, people had to wait longer to get parking. If you mention this information, it will help people to reserve parking spot ahead while making reservations.

Hoping for a careful and prompt action.

Yours sincerely

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly identified the incorrect information regarding the park's opening date, explained the importance of accuracy for readers' travel plans, and suggested that the magazine include additional details about parking and access. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to an editor. To reach a higher band, ensure that your suggestions are more directly linked to the magazine's responsibility; for instance, you could explicitly suggest they publish a correction or an updated online notice to rectify the error.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the task. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Because of' and 'I also want you to', which help the flow. However, the transition between the correction of the date and the suggestion for additional parking information is slightly abrupt. Using more varied linking words or phrases to connect your ideas would improve the overall cohesion and make the progression of your argument smoother.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'recreational park', 'postponed', and 'globally distributed'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'an incorrect information' (information is uncountable) and 'add the process of getting access to park' (should be 'the park'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, incorporating more precise or sophisticated collocations would elevate your score. Focus on using articles correctly with nouns and refining your phrasing for a more professional tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as missing articles ('the park', 'the article') and the aforementioned error with 'an incorrect information'. Additionally, 'Dear sir' should be capitalized as 'Dear Sir'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and the use of definite and indefinite articles, which are essential for grammatical accuracy in formal writing.

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