Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

• correct the information in the article
• explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
• suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

Hope you are doing well. I recently read an article which was published in your magazine, but it contains wrong information about my town.

I remember, in last summer a lot of visitors came to visit my town. One day on the beach two groups start fighting on personal matter. One boy of the group carry his licensed pistol and he starts firing, suddenly the other guy came and tried to stop him but his hand divert from his position there were a lot of families and children sat on beach side. But thank god no body hurts, you published in your article one guy was dead during this fight.

You have to publish correct information, otherwise people will scary and avoid to visit these type of places. Because they want to save their families.

I suggest you please publish that article again or you have to clarify to people by the internet if it is possible or by video recording. So, people can visit my town without any fear and enjoy their vacation time in the beautiful area.

Warms Regards

Ram

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: correcting the misinformation, explaining the importance of accuracy, and suggesting a resolution. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to an editor. However, the narrative regarding the incident is somewhat confusing and lacks the necessary clarity for a formal complaint. For instance, the description of the fight is overly detailed and grammatically disjointed, which detracts from the professional tone required for this task. To improve, focus on presenting the facts more concisely and maintaining a consistent, formal register throughout the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure of the complaint. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. Transitions between ideas, such as moving from the description of the incident to the impact on the town, are abrupt. The use of referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the sequence of events is difficult to follow. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would significantly enhance the flow of the writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and sophistication expected at higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'on personal matter' and 'people will scary'. The word choice is often repetitive and basic, which limits the impact of the letter. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise collocations and formal vocabulary suitable for a letter to an editor, such as 'misleading information' instead of 'wrong information' or 'rectify' instead of 'publish again'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Issues include tense inconsistencies (e.g., 'two groups start fighting' instead of 'started'), subject-verb agreement, and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'people will scary' instead of 'people will be scared'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma splices. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from achieving a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for tense consistency would be beneficial.

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