Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

• correct the information in the article
• explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
• suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to bring the incorrect information about my town that I have scrutinised in one of the articles, published in your international travel magazine on 5th-May-2024, to your immediate concern.

I would like to correct the information regarding the location of the water-sports club which is located on the outskirts of the city whereas the writer has mentioned it in the centre of the town. Although there is one in the centre of the city, it is closed to the public since 2016.

I think that it is crucial to update this data at the earliest possible since it will mislead many tourists. As a result, they will have a horrible experience visiting the town because it will not just waste their time but money as well.

It would be great if you could stop producing further copies of the given article and publish a new one containing the updated location. Moreover, I would also urge checking the facts by inquiring the concerned department prior to publication due to a magazine like yours has a deep influence on the wider community.

I hope that you would take the necessary actions in this regard. Looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Your's faithfully,

Kiran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully covered all bullet points of the task. You clearly corrected the misinformation regarding the water-sports club, explaining that it is situated on the outskirts rather than the centre. Furthermore, you effectively outlined why accurate information is vital for tourists to prevent wasted time and money, and you offered practical solutions, such as stopping the distribution of the current issue and publishing a retraction or update. Your tone is appropriate for a formal letter to an editor, and the purpose is well-sustained throughout. Although some points could be expanded slightly further, your ideas are fully relevant and directly answer the prompt requirements. You have achieved a solid Band 7.0 for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

Your letter is logically organised and easy to follow. You use a clear paragraph structure, dedicating each paragraph to a distinct purpose: introduction, correction of facts, explanation of importance, proposed solutions, and a polite sign-off. Cohesive devices such as 'Although', 'As a result', and 'Moreover' are utilised appropriately to link your thoughts and create a smooth progression of ideas. While referencing is generally clear, transitioning between sentences could occasionally be more fluid. However, overall progression is clear throughout, and paragraphing is managed sufficiently and appropriately, corresponding well to the requirements of Band 7.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary that allows for some precision and flexibility. You successfully incorporated less common expressions such as 'scrutinised', 'outskirts', 'mislead', and 'deep influence'. However, there are a few minor lexical inaccuracies and awkward collocations. For instance, stating that you 'scrutinised' the information is slightly unnatural in this context, and writing 'due to a magazine like yours' should ideally be 'because a magazine like yours'. Additionally, the sign-off 'Your's faithfully' contains an unnecessary apostrophe. Despite these occasional slips, your vocabulary is adequate to convey your message clearly, fitting the Band 6.5 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a good mix of simple and complex sentence structures, including conditional and subordinate clauses such as 'Although there is one in the centre of the city, it is closed to the public since 2016' and 'It would be great if you could stop producing...'. There are several error-free sentences, showing good overall control of grammar. However, there are minor grammatical inaccuracies, such as tense consistency (e.g., 'it is closed... since 2016' should be 'has been closed') and a minor punctuation slip in the sign-off ('Your's'). These errors do not impede communication, and your structural range is respectable, leading to a comfortable Band 6.5 score.

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