Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

• correct the information in the article
• explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
• suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear sir/madam,

You gave some information about some discount on some store in your magazine and that is wrong information beacause they rise price of the product and provide it will be on same price . You should be give correct infromation in your article.

You need to clear about information before giving article in newspaper beacause people read those newspaper article and they got attracted and will buy some unnecessary things and do it more expenses and people get various kind of inforamtion throgh managazine because when people see discount , they think that they are saving their money.

I suggest that managzine should reprint article with correct information and give confession about wrong information so, people get correct information and they do not confusion and not making unnecessary expenses so people are still believing information which they get it from article in magazine.

Yours sincerly,

priyanka keyur paneliya

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers all three bullet points from the prompt: it attempts to correct the information regarding discounts in the article, explains why accuracy is important so readers do not waste money, and suggests that the magazine should reprint the article with the correct details and issue an apology. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive, and the tone is overly informal and sometimes unclear. For example, the phrase 'give confession about wrong information' lacks precision for a formal letter to an editor. Consequently, the task is addressed adequately for a lower-intermediate level, leading to a band score of 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter is structured with appropriate paragraph breaks separating the opening, the body points, and the sign-off, which gives it an overall visual arrangement. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by a lack of cohesive devices and heavy reliance on run-on sentences. For instance, the second paragraph connects multiple distinct thoughts using repetitive conjunctions like 'because' and 'and', creating a cluttered structure. Referencing is also weak, as seen in the phrase 'do it more expenses'. While paragraphs are attempted, the internal cohesion is inadequate and repetitive, placing this at a band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple words like 'information', 'article', 'people', and 'wrong'. There are noticeable lexical errors, such as 'they rise price', 'be give correct infromation', and 'give confession', which reflect a lack of control over word formation, collocation, and spelling ('beacause', 'throgh', 'managzine', 'sincerly'). Although the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic message, these frequent inaccuracies cause some difficulty for the reader, matching the descriptors for band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The writer demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying almost entirely on faulty attempts at complex sentences joined by coordinating or subordinating conjunctions. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('in your magazine', 'on some store'), tense confusion ('they rise price'), and subject-verb agreement issues ('people get various kind'). Punctuation is also problematic, marked by missing capitals and incorrect comma splices ('...and do it more expenses and people get...'). These errors are frequent and occasionally obscure the exact meaning, aligning with a band 4.0.

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