Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

• correct the information in the article
• explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
• suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction on an article which was published in your magazine about my home town.

My name is Pranusha and I born and bought up in Hyderabad city. I believe I am the right person to correct because I know how my town evolved over a period of time. In the article, you mentioned it's a affordable place to live, however, there are not much places to explore for tourist. The place is famous of top universities, multinational companies and many tourist attractions. There are many big hotels like Taj, Marriot which are designed as per the foreigners choice.

Information in the magazine plays a crucial role on the decision of the reader. Many tourist may choose magazines to know about the place before they explore the city. If you write an article without knowing actual facts about the place it just affect the revenue of the city.

I would appreciate it if you write another article writing specifically about the tourist spots in my city. If you need any further information about the famous attractions, I would be happy to help you.

Best regards,

Pranusha

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three requirements: it challenges the article’s description of Hyderabad, explains that inaccurate information can affect readers’ decisions and the city’s revenue, and asks the magazine to publish a more focused article while offering further help. The correction is relevant, especially the contrast between the claim that there are few attractions and the city’s universities, companies and tourist sites. However, the exact inaccurate details are not clearly separated from the corrections, and the examples of attractions remain general rather than naming specific places. The importance of accuracy is explained, but the suggested response could be more precise—for example, requesting a correction or retraction as well as a new article. These details would make the response more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening complaint, a paragraph correcting the article, an explanation of why accuracy matters, and a closing request. This progression makes the purpose easy to follow, and paragraphing is appropriate. Some links between ideas are less smooth, however. In the second paragraph, the shift from the affordability claim to the lack of tourist attractions and then to hotels is abrupt; clearer sequencing would show how each point corrects the article. The phrase “If you write an article without knowing actual facts” also introduces a conditional idea that is not closely connected to the preceding sentence. More precise referencing and transitions would make cohesion less mechanical and the argument more continuous.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the purpose and includes some useful topic-specific language, such as “multinational companies,” “tourist attractions,” “revenue,” and “evolved.” These choices help communicate the city’s appeal and the consequences of inaccurate reporting. There are also several imprecise or unnatural collocations that limit flexibility: “dissatisfaction on an article,” “famous of top universities,” and “designed as per the foreigners choice.” “Tourist” is also used where the plural “tourists” is needed, and “affordable place” does not clearly identify whether the article’s claim itself is being corrected. Aim for more natural combinations and precise descriptions, such as “complaint about the article” and “popular with international visitors.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple sentences and more complex forms, including the contrast with “however,” a conditional sentence, and the polite request “I would appreciate it if…”. Meaning is generally clear, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “I born and bought up” needs the passive form “was born and brought up,” while “there are not much places” requires “many places.” The article in “it's a affordable place” should be “an,” and “Many tourist may choose” needs plural agreement. In “it just affect the revenue,” the verb should agree with “it” (“affects”). Improving these forms and checking articles, plurals and verb agreement would make the sentences more consistently accurate.

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