Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

• correct the information in the article
• explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
• suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

Recently, I have read an article, which was published by your company on an international travel magazine. Overall, I am satisfied with the travel blog, and feeling really proud about the town, where I spent two decades while growing up. However, I figured that some informations regarding the town demographic culture were misrepresented. For instance, the celebration of Diwali festival were only allowed for Hindus, which does not represent the ground reality.

Because India is a secular country, it is extremely vital for us to stay unite against these kind of false narratives, to keep peace in the country. While growing up, I was used to celebrate Diwali in my school, where students come from all the religions. In fact, even in school students were taught to respect all the religion.

I would really appreciate if you could take this sensitive topic into consideration, and make sure that this kind of misrepresentation should not be published.

Thank you

Yours faithfully,

Jay

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the central error: the article says Diwali celebrations are allowed only for Hindus, and you correct this by explaining that people of different religions celebrate it, including students at your school. You also explain why accuracy matters, linking false information to social unity and peace. However, the correction could be more explicit about the town’s actual practice, and the importance of accurate travel information for readers is not fully explained. Your requested action is also limited to asking the magazine to consider the issue and avoid publishing similar misrepresentation; specify that it should correct or retract the article and publish an apology or clarification. These underdeveloped parts keep the response from addressing every purpose equally fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: you introduce the problem, explain its social importance, and finish with a request to the magazine. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “For instance” and “In fact” guide the reader through your examples. Some connections are less smooth or precise, however. The opening moves from praise of the magazine to the error without a clear transition, while “Because India is a secular country” does not fully explain how this supports the specific correction. The final request also does not clearly refer back to the article or state the steps you want taken. Make these links more explicit and use a closing paragraph that directly summarises the requested action.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of vocabulary for the topic, including “misrepresented,” “false narratives,” “secular,” and “sensitive topic.” These choices communicate the seriousness of the error and show an attempt to use language beyond basic everyday terms. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, though, such as “town demographic culture,” “stay unite,” and “ground reality.” “Some informations” also uses an uncountable noun as if it were plural. Aim for more precise expressions such as “cultural practices in the town,” “remain united,” and “the reality on the ground.” More natural phrasing will make the letter sound clearer and more professional while preserving your intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the relative clause in “an article, which was published…” and the reason clause beginning “Because India is a secular country.” Most of your meaning remains understandable, but some grammatical errors occur. For example, “the celebration … were” has subject–verb disagreement, and “students come from all the religions” shifts tense and uses an unnecessary article. In “I would really appreciate if,” the clause needs “it” after “appreciate”; the final phrase “should not be published” also creates an awkward passive construction after “make sure.” Review agreement, tense consistency, articles, and clause patterns, and proofread punctuation around introductory phrases. These corrections would improve accuracy without requiring more complicated sentences.

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