Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

• correct the information in the article
• explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
• suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

In this email I am writing my point of view about just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about my town that is incorrect.

Basically, this information about healthcare which is very sensitive topic according to me so I have to clear this point because in my town there is so many hospitals which provide excellent service 24 hours no waiting or anything.

why it is important for the magazine to give correct information because no doubt it is international magazine so every read this so this totally bad impact on our town who want to travel and exploure our town to make so good memories with their loved ones'.

According to me, magazine owner take this step out clear this situation in a good way and first research on our town by goggle and check everything properly and read the reviews about hospitals and service and then write good things about my town and make us feel proud.

thanks.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the main situation by identifying healthcare information as incorrect, explaining that your town has hospitals offering round-the-clock service, and asking the magazine to research the town and correct its coverage. However, the correction is vague: you do not say what the article actually claimed or provide specific, verifiable details about the hospitals. The importance of accuracy is mentioned, but the effect on visitors and the town is not clearly explained. The response is also 143 words, below the required 150, which limits the opportunity to develop these points. To strengthen the letter, state the article’s error precisely, explain its consequences, and make a clear request such as publishing a correction or apology.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The ideas follow a broadly sensible order: you introduce the complaint, describe the healthcare issue, explain why accuracy matters, and suggest a response. Linking phrases such as “Basically,” “According to me,” and “because” help signal these stages. However, the response is presented as one continuous block, so the separate purposes of the letter are not clearly organised into paragraphs. Some connections are repetitive or awkward, particularly the repeated use of “because,” and the long sentence beginning “why it is important” combines several ideas without clear progression. Use a short opening paragraph, then separate paragraphs for the correction, its importance, and your requested action. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise referencing would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “healthcare,” “hospitals,” “excellent service,” and “reviews,” so the reader can understand the general concern. However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate or informal, which makes parts of the letter less clear. For example, “every read this” does not express your intended meaning clearly, while “exploure” and “goggle” are misspelled. Phrases such as “clear this point” and “take this step out” are not natural in this context. Aim for more precise formal expressions, such as “correct the inaccurate claim,” “readers,” and “conduct further research.” Proofreading spelling and choosing natural collocations would improve clarity and suitability for a letter to an editor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, but sentence structures are often faulty, and errors sometimes make the message difficult to follow. For instance, “I am writing my point of view about just read an article” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “in my town there is so many hospitals” has an agreement error. The sentence beginning “why it is important” is not formed as a complete sentence, and the final request contains several clauses joined without clear punctuation. Capitalisation is also inconsistent, as “why” begins a new sentence in lowercase. Use complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, check singular and plural agreement, and divide long ideas into shorter sentences. A few accurate complex sentences would add range without sacrificing clarity.

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