Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

• correct the information in the article
• explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
• suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

My name is Naitali Patel and i am writing this letter to request you about correcting the information which written in an international travel book because i read that book yesterday and i found that the wrong information given in that magazine about my town.

To begin with, i would like to correct the information about the population of my town, it has around 25000 population and i found that 22800 people living in my town written in that book. Additionally with the wrong information of that book other book reader can get wrong information and it can spreads easily and also because of that human being has to suffered from some services like they all are can not get the benefits easily.

In addition i would like suggest that first you have to get proper data from the municipality and then you have to print it in the international travel book so other country's people can get write information.

I am looking forward for newly print book as soon as possible.

Thanking you.

Yours sincerely,

Naitali Patel.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you correct the population figure (about 25,000 rather than 22,800), explain that inaccurate information may mislead readers, and recommend checking municipal data before publication. The correction is clear and relevant. However, the explanation of why accuracy matters is less fully developed: the reference to people suffering from “some services” is unclear, and the letter does not explain specifically how travellers or the town could be affected. Your proposed action is useful, but it focuses mainly on future editions; you could also ask the editor to correct the current article or publish a clarification. These unevenly developed points keep the response from being fully effective, though its purpose is apparent.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a recognisable progression: you introduce the complaint, give the population correction, explain a consequence, suggest checking official data, and close politely. Paragraphing helps separate the main stages, and connectors such as “To begin with” and “In addition” make the sequence easy to follow. This provides a coherent overall arrangement and some flexibility beyond simple sequencing. However, several links are mechanical, and the long second paragraph combines the correction with consequences that are not clearly connected. The reference in “that book” and “that magazine” also shifts, making the publication being discussed less consistent. Grouping each task point into a distinct paragraph and using clearer links between cause and effect would strengthen progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the basic purpose, with relevant terms such as “population,” “municipality,” “information,” and “international travel.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “request you about correcting” is not a natural way to make this request, while “other book reader” and “get write information” are unclear. “Human being has to suffered from some services” also does not express the intended consequence precisely. Aim for natural phrases such as “ask you to correct the article,” “readers,” and “receive accurate information.” More precise vocabulary for the impact on visitors and the town would also help.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “Additionally” and one explaining what the magazine should do. The main message can generally be understood, but errors in sentence construction and verb forms are frequent enough to affect clarity. For instance, “the information which written” needs a passive verb form, and “it can spreads” has an incorrect verb form after a modal. In “people living in my town written in that book,” the relationship between the clauses is unclear. There are also problems with sentence boundaries: the population correction is joined to the following clause with a comma. Practise building accurate clauses first, then combine them with conjunctions and punctuation; check subject–verb agreement and verb forms after modal verbs.

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