Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.
Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter
- correct the information in the article
- explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
- suggest what the magazine should do about this situation
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 7.0)
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to express my concern regarding an incorrect article published in an international travel magazine about my town.
In the article, writer mentioned the limited tourist attractions and unreliable public transportation in my area, which is completely inaccurate. However, we have many popular attractions, such as historical buildings, museums, parks, beaches, and temples. Moreover, public transportation is quite frequent and even reliable on weekends.
It is essential to give accurate information to readers because it can benefit economically to my town by increasing its popularity among tourists. In addition, local people may know about frequent bus and train services to commute to their destinations.
I would appreciate it if you could re-publish this article with correct details. I also suggest that pictures of attractions and transportation print in the article for readers.
I am looking forward to seeing these changes at the earliest convenience.
Yours faithfully,
Prabh
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0
You address all three requirements: you correct the claims about attractions and transport, explain the economic and practical value of accurate information, and ask the magazine to republish the article with corrections. The examples of “historical buildings, museums, parks, beaches, and temples” make the correction clear, while the letter’s polite tone and closing suit the purpose. Your ideas are relevant and the main request is easy to identify. To strengthen the response further, make the proposed remedy more specific—for example, ask the editor to verify the details with the local tourism office before publishing a correction. The point about local people using transport information is relevant, but could be explained more clearly in relation to the article’s international readership.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0
The letter has a clear progression: you introduce the problem, correct the information, explain why accuracy matters, and propose action. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “In addition” help connect related points. The opening and closing also make the format recognisably formal. Some connections could be more precise: “However” does not clearly signal the contrast between the article’s claim and the reality, and the final paragraph combines republication with adding pictures without explaining how these actions relate. Use a more direct contrast marker, then separate the correction request from any suggestion about illustrations. This would make the progression feel more deliberate and the cohesion less dependent on explicit linkers.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.5
You use a suitable range of vocabulary for a formal complaint, including “express my concern,” “inaccurate,” “accurate information,” and “commute.” The list of local attractions also gives the correction useful specificity. Meaning remains clear throughout, but some word choices and collocations are not fully natural: “benefit economically to my town” and “transportation print in the article” make the intended meaning less fluent. “Limited tourist attractions” is understandable, though “few tourist attractions” would be more idiomatic when reporting the article’s claim. To move beyond adequate range, aim for more precise collocations and formal phrasing, such as “boost the local economy” and “include photographs of local attractions and transport services.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5
You use a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, including the reason clause beginning “because” and the conditional request “I would appreciate it if…”. Most sentences communicate their meaning clearly, and punctuation is generally controlled. Some grammatical errors remain, however. In “the article, writer mentioned,” the singular count noun needs a determiner (“the writer”), while “pictures … transportation print” needs a passive form such as “pictures … should be included.” The phrase “I am looking forward to seeing these changes at the earliest convenience” also needs a possessive determiner (“at your earliest convenience”). Review articles, passive constructions, and standard formal request patterns to improve accuracy while retaining your sentence variety.
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