Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter

• describe what you enjoyed about the course
• say how much cooking you've done since the course
• suggest another cookery course you’d like the school to offer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Sir/ Madam,

I'm writing on to give the account on what iI study on cookery scool academic.

Firstly, I really appricate your effort to send me to the school. I really enjoyed everybeat of the school, I can make different meal in lacal and international now.

Secondly, I can rice in different way, rice with stew, joff rice, fried rice in local and internatioal steyle. different kind of stew, vegetables, melon stew and so on.

Lastly, I would like if we can take another people to go lean this course so, will be good our company cook for our guss and from we can make an income.

I' m looking forward for more repone on it.

thanks.

Your faithfully,

Ojo Oluwatoyin Mercy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You make an attempt to respond to the letter task and mention enjoying the course, cooking rice and stews, and wanting another course. However, the required points are not all clearly addressed: you do not say how much cooking you have done since the course, and the final suggestion seems to be about taking other people on the same course rather than naming a different course you would like the school to offer. The enjoyment point is also very general, with little detail about what specifically made the course enjoyable. The response is 27 words below the required minimum, which further limits the development of your ideas. Add clear, specific information for each bullet point.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure, with separate paragraphs introduced by “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Lastly,” so the reader can see that you are moving between points. The opening and closing also help signal that this is intended as a letter. However, the progression is not always clear: the paragraph about rice and stew does not explain how much you have cooked since the course, and the final paragraph shifts to taking other people rather than clearly suggesting a new course. Some links, such as “so,” do not make the relationship between ideas clear. Use one paragraph for each task point and connect details explicitly, for example, “Since completing the course, I have cooked…”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant cookery vocabulary, including “rice,” “stew,” “vegetables,” and “fried rice,” which helps identify the subject of the letter. However, the range is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “appricate,” “lacal,” “internatioal steyle,” and “repone.” Phrases such as “enjoyed everybeat of the school” and “give the account on what iI study” are not natural ways to express your meaning. Aim for accurate, familiar phrases before trying more ambitious wording. For example, describe specific dishes you learned to prepare and use clear expressions such as “I particularly enjoyed the practical lessons.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form a letter with several sentences and use basic sequencing, but sentence structures are mostly simple and control is inconsistent. Errors include “I'm writing on to give,” “I can make different meal,” and “I would like if we can take another people,” where the sentence patterns, articles, plurals, or verb forms are not controlled. The sentence beginning “different kind of stew” is also incomplete. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, as in “iI” and the lower-case start after a full stop. Practise complete subject–verb sentences and check agreement and tense. For example: “Since the course, I have cooked several meals for my family.”

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