Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter

• describe what you enjoyed about the course
• say how much cooking you've done since the course
• suggest another cookery course you’d like the school to offer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

Letter Of Feedback

I am Mary Harman one of the from the East king London. I am writing to give feedback on the 2 yrs recently concluded cookery course.

The period of learning was a very comfortable era for acquiring knowledge making it easy for learning. The present of all the logistics makes the learning more palatable . the friendly atmosphere among the tutor and the students makes id more conducive and enjoyable throughout the learning process I enjoyed most.

Since my graduation, I have baked in 3 popular occasion, 5 small gathering of about 10 to 12 persons not including the ones in family use. Aside these, I do prepare cookies in small quantities for school children and friends all at will. The more practical I go into the more passion increase I got for cookeries.

Due to the passion driving I had in cookery I would be going for 4 years Professional advanced Learning in cookery.

Thanks for the wonderful opportunity .

Yours faithfully

Mary

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: describing what you enjoyed, mentioning your cooking activity since the course, and suggesting a future course. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention enjoying the 'friendly atmosphere,' you could have provided more specific details about a particular technique or recipe that made the course valuable. The suggestion for a future course is also quite brief. To improve, try to expand on your points with more descriptive language and personal examples to fully satisfy the requirements of a formal letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure, moving from the introduction to the feedback points and a closing. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as 'Aside these' or 'The more practical I go into.' Paragraphing is present, but the transitions between ideas could be smoother. The opening and closing salutations are slightly inconsistent with the prompt's instruction to begin with 'Dear Sir or Madam,' as you used 'Dear Sir' and 'Yours faithfully' (which is correct for 'Dear Sir or Madam,' but the opening did not match the prompt).

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of unnatural word choice and phrasing. For example, 'comfortable era' is not the correct collocation for a short course, and 'present of all the logistics' is unclear. You also use 'cookeries' incorrectly; 'cooking' or 'culinary arts' would be more appropriate. While you attempt to use some descriptive language, the lack of precision in word choice occasionally hinders the clarity of your message. Expanding your range of collocations will help improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('the friendly atmosphere... makes id'), article usage ('the from the East king'), and sentence structure ('The more practical I go into the more passion increase I got'). While the meaning is generally understandable, these errors are persistent and sometimes distract the reader. You rely mostly on simple sentence structures; incorporating a wider variety of complex sentences with more accurate punctuation would significantly enhance your writing and demonstrate better control over English grammar.

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