Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter

• describe what you enjoyed about the course
• say how much cooking you've done since the course
• suggest another cookery course you’d like the school to offer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope this letter finds you well the cookery course done from Your college was a awesome and learned new lesson for life and cooking skills as well as this is a small feeback from my side to your school so every should join this wounderful and intersting course.

If I tell about Cookery course that I took was so much interesting and so much thankful to professer Lee who was so much experienced and good cheif. The professor help us by teaching first the basics skills in the first class that we does'nt know. How to prep stuff for food like cake pastries and other stuff that was so wonderfull. Moreover, professer taught us every thing step by step and thanks to western community college staff that help to organised every pratical in the college and help us in fiancial by fee structure that we can pay it in installments that was so helpfully for the students that was doing this type of course. At the last, this course make us so much capable that we can run our business by opening or investing in the bakery so we can earing good profit of much so, could be so much thankfully four the all my teachers and college staff for making me capable for do my business and future great.

Yours faithful

Harveer Pandher

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student addresses all parts of the prompt, though the development of ideas is somewhat limited and constrained by language errors. Regarding the first bullet point, the writer describes what they enjoyed about the course, mentioning Professor Lee's experience and the helpful basics of food preparation. For the second point, they touch upon running a business and making a profit, implying post-course application, but they do not clearly state how much cooking they have done since finishing. For the third bullet point, the suggestion for another course is completely missing; the student discusses bakery investment instead of suggesting a specific new course the school should offer. Therefore, while the response attempts the prompt, key bullet points are missed or only partially fulfilled, aligning with a Band 5 performance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The letter lacks appropriate paragraphing and is essentially structured as one long, run-on sentence. Cohesive devices are used repeatedly and inaccurately, such as 'so much' and 'at the last', which creates a mechanical and confusing flow. The progression of ideas is hindered by a lack of clear sentence boundaries and punctuation, making it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. Pronoun referencing is also weak, as seen in phrases like 'that we does'nt know' and 'that was so helpfully'. These issues place the response firmly in the Band 4 to 5 range for cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on phrases like 'so much' and 'stuff'. There are noticeable word choice and spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'feeback', 'wounderful', 'cheif' instead of chief/chef, 'fiancial', 'helpfully', and 'earing' instead of earning. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary related to business and cooking, such as 'investing' and 'bakery', the numerous lexical inaccuracies and limited range restrict the score to a Band 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on long, convoluted run-on sentences joined by conjunctions like 'and' and 'so'. There is a complete lack of control over punctuation, with no proper full stops used to separate independent clauses in the main body. Frequent grammatical errors occur, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the professor help us'), incorrect verb tenses ('cookery course done from Your college was a awesome'), and faulty relative clauses ('students that was doing'). These persistent errors frequently cause strain for the reader.

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